All Comments on 'Succumbed'

Strange metaphors introduce way too early in the narrative.

Disappointed at the end. Kinda like wham bam thank you ma'am

"Give it to me, my hot junk" is one of the most hilariously bad lines I've ever rad. Story is pretty mediocre. Moves too fast and nobody is likable

Civil engineering. Civic engineering would be building cities, or possibly hatchbacks.

Not easy to read, to all over the place. You need to go back and fix this.