All Comments on 'Summer Camping Ch. 01'

Our campground was the furthest from the river. The ranger had steered us to a beautiful spot. The ground had a gentle slope and if the ground was rocky the thick blanket of pine needles hide the fact. The showers were a couple hundred yards away and it's was half-mile hike to the river, but it was a great spot. We pitched our cheap Sears &Roebuck tents in an open area under the trees.

pine needles hid the fact.

and it was a half-mile hike

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Your mistakes?

I like your style and the story could be that of any one of your readers, including mine. You fessed up to the errors up front, so I'll not mention those that needed a red pencil. But it totally represents the sexual awakening that most teens must go through on the journey toward adulthood. Maybe I should have given a five, up the ultimate should be saved for the truly best.

I like this story I hope you keep righting these story s or one like it I think it needs a seven for story line it kep me reading tank you

Humor, innocence, and maturity make a good story. Hope there is more to come.

Very good and lively description of a fundamental process of exploration and discovery that initiate us as sexual being. A good build-up to a continuation...