All Comments on 'Summer of Madeline'

Was a bit short... Don't take long to post new chapters of the Magic Love Family series. I really like that one!!!

So what was the girlfriend’s problem? What rumors was she spreading? Why did her friend say her issues would be over by the end of summer?

Love it, thank you. I hope you will write some more of these two. Seems to me they are heading to be together. What is the surprise? Will he be meeting his child they made together? anxious to read more please.

I'm sorry. I really tried.

I stopped about half-way through the second page. The writing seems disjointed to me. I felt like a lot of stuff was left out.

I like your stuff but this.... Just didn't work. I felt like they were talking in code or had some inside joke that 'us' the readers didn't know, so it didn't make any sense. The Idea had promise, but in my opinion the execution on this one was lacking. I kept waiting for explanations for everything and they never came. I think I understand a couple, but most soared right over my head here.

Your writing is sort of herky jerky. Not enough thought development. As already asked, wtf was up with the ex-gf? Why would the sis come back to fuck him after 4 years???? 3 stars only.

Good story, but the main character is a jerk.

Good writing. Need another visit from her or maybe he visits her.

Loved it

loved their chemistry! keeeeeep going

First part started out kind of messed up (I've commented in previous stories about how you portray thoughts going through the protagonist's head) but it really came together in the end. I would have liked her to answer the original story - what happened with his ex that drove her to come stay with him?

Very good. Slow build. Little long in the beginning setting up his loss before Maddie came into the picture.

That is kinda missing a lot of things that needed to be explained better to make the story flow. It is incomplete and lacks to much. Could have been better forsure