All Comments on 'Sunny - A Lonely Wife'

Says it all - oh dear!

Way to fast (when did your panties get removed) please don't waste anyone else's time continuing this garbage

Story line is promising but you need to get an English editor to correct phrases, and expressions.

Send a text message or write a story, make up your (not ur) mind. It's "you" not "u" and "my" not "y". The story wasn't that good anyway.

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Please.......let this be your last attempt at an erotic story. To put it simply.......YOU SUCK!

We need a continuation on this one. He is a black guy with a big cock, and she is hungry for cum and is young enough to be fertile. Keep them fucking with him knocking her up with his niggah baby.

I gave it 75 for the story idea but you must slow future chapters down, you are rushing through them way too fast.

I am going to cut a lot more slack than others did.

You need to learn NOT to use text messaging spelling in a prose story. It makes us all think that you are uneducated, which you may be but you don;t need to advertise it. GET AN EDITOR! Slow down and develop the story a little. You want the people reading this to connect with the characters.

Try again, but take your time and have it proofread.

Cheers

C

not even worth one star.