All Comments on 'Surprise Chance for Love Ch. 01'

This was a good beginning, and am awaiting further chapters. The only caveat was the use of hyphenated words - it was a bit of a distraction. I suspect the submission was in a different format.

The end just leaves the reader hanging. Needs another chapter or a more definitive ending if the writer intends this story to be complete.

Dude, it's SOOODAAAA in Wisc.! Otherwise great start to the story!

... use of hyphens is very distracting.

Great to see you back!! Been too long

unnecessary comments are disrupting this site. Go away!!!

That's a start of an enjoyable story. Can't wait for more chapters.

Good start; I'd like to see where you go with it, but the un-nec-ess-ary hyphens got old fast, among other minor things. Nothing that a good editor couldn't clean up...

...now, I would like to read more!

I loved Crazy tall, looking forward to this series now :)

Please continue. I think you have a great start!

I hope you will give us more soon, I enjoyed the first chapter

Very well written, nice character build and expandable in so many ways.

BRAVO!!

Really enjoyed what I hope is a many chapter story.

Had me captured early on, and had a smile on my face.

Please don't cut this one short!

looking forward to seeing where it goes from here.

Glad to see you writing again. You're an exceptional story teller. Can't wait for you to continue this story. The beginning is excellent.

These words are NOT hyphenated, they are one word.

unde-sirable

fif-teen

per-son

visi-ble

ap-propriately

uncomforta-ble

some-thing

scurry-ing

en-tered

re-turn

cau-tious

im-pressed

lift-ing

gar-age

mil-lion

re-lax

real-ized

be-tween

pan-cakes

ta-ble

stand-ing

pleas-ant

These are TWO words, not hyphenated

partially-unbuttoned

six-foot

two-inch

fair-sized

back-yard

walk-in

tooth-brush

weed-infested

Stop with the hyphens, they're not needed and distract from what is otherwise good writing.

Reader - I'm not sure where you're seeing all these hyphens, but you might check your Word program as I'm not putting them in.

Good read so far. Interesting - good or bad still undecided.

Also, would you care to read the story once again? Because as previous anon said, lots of unnecessary hyphens, which is distracting. And the spelling would be 'ketchup' instead of 'ketsup'.

Don't know what kind of word processing program you are using, But you might try resetting your page width to the same as the publication and typing that way. Software and computers have a mind all there own.

You know why the tell you to reboot your computer???

Didn't kick it far enough the first time. I recommend steel toed shoes

You're full of shit, there are hypens where they are not supposed to be, don't blame someone's word processing, it is the way YOU posted it to LIT!

Hi, Everyone,

Sorry for long absence, but will complete this story now. I'll also make sure whatever was causing the crazy hyphens goes away.

Best,

BW69

Are you people for really. Bloody grammar critics honestly. Did you like the story, YES or NO. I enjoyed the storyline so far and I’m looking forward to the next chapter. But there again, what do I know . I don’t have a Degree in Literature like the rest of you do....now pick the shit out of my grammar....⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

A nice start for a romance. Likes it. And .... I am not interested in grammar and spelling mistakes.

I like the story and look forward to the sequels.

Highfive from Germany

Liked the story. But, seriously, you should remove the hyphen key from your computer. WTF?

Readers, don't waste time on this story. It does not have an ending. (Comment Written January 2022).