All Comments on 'Susie, The Cheerleader'

Great characterization! Not sure how you did it. but, despite her outrageous behavior, you made Susie quite believable which, of course, made the story that much more fun. 2 for 2, so far.Looking forward to your next effort, Thanks, again!

To be honest I didn't make it all the way through the first page. Unnecessary details that got too wordy, no clear straight story line, too many tangents.

The other commenter should have stuck with it. Though he/she has a bit of a point. The first little bit was confusing. Was she your girlfriend or your wife? Flashbacks are tricky. Once it got rolling, pretty hot.

Nice job. Keep it up. Love to see where you take Susie.

Omg, that is exactly what my girlfriend and I wound do. One day I'll write the story. Loved it!