All Comments on 'Swan'

it was a good story, a tad "too grown up" when it came to the terms of endearment, but still very good

a very good first time story. The foreplay was great, but a little more basking in the afterglow would have been wonderful. Thanks for a good read.

This is a very sweet story. I like it.

Excellent, very sweet story, nicely told. Well up to your usual standard!

Glad to see you are writing more now. Always enjoyed your work.

The build up was too slow & the climax to fast.

Very nicely written, well characterized, but comes to a screeching halt.

Apologies for the rather abrupt ending. I only decided to start writing this one on the final day of the contest, and it was submitted at one-thirty in the morning, UK time. I couldn't keep my eyes open to write any more! Once the contest is done I may rewrite the end a tad. We'll see.

It was a great story...I loved everything word..I do wish you can continued this story. Keep up the good work

never mind enjoyed the slow start but could have made the love making scene longer.

Thanks for the lovely story.

( And I did not go sailing this year:( A, maybe there's still time in Sept )

of what a story in this category should be like. Well written and presented. The ending left me wanting more... just like sex usually does. Thank you.

Alex, I have read most of your stories at Literotica, and consider you one of the best writers here. All the red Hs are a testament to that. I would really like to see a sequel.

Nice. Sweet. Well developed plot.

I genuinely adored this story. At times I did find the language a tad bit 'antiquated' for the age group, but it didn't dilute the budding romance. It was sweet and endearing, addressing a first time how I would imagine it would be.

I'm not quite sure why I turned to this story in the first-place, but I can say that I was hooked from the beginning.<br/>

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I agree with the comments that the story could have gone on a little(lot) longer, and hope you will find the time to work on it after the competition.<br/>

I've done a little bit of sailing in the past and finding a story oriented around sailing was wonderful. I do hope you will return to this setting again.<br/>

Off to look at more of your stories,<br/>

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Beautifully written and romantic. Good luck in the contest.

You produce such a high quality story, Alex.

Damned fine writing

my early 20'S when I had a 20' daysailer and my friend had a 26' sailboat that slept 4. We often cruised the Chesapeake Bay with its many "secret" stopping places including a favorite island where we often anchored to swim and explore. Scouting the local towns for available feminine companions was fun and bringing some back to the boats added to the allure of the Bay. I also brought friends from Philadelphia to my slip near Baltimore, and we had lots of fun sailing all day and partying all night. There is nothing like sailing and sex, and this is one of several tales that Alex has written about it, so he probably has enjoyed the sport(s) himself. I look forward to more fun on the water stories from Alex. Thanks.

Thanks a lot for that charming novel. Many nice pic came to my mind, and also reminded me some past times. Thanks.

I wouldn't mind seeing a follow up, but this was excellent romance!

I thoroughly enjoyed this story. Every guy who has ever held a soft warm loving young woman in their arms and felt the love transmitted between them know and understand the values of this story. And giving her sweet conjugal love and satisfying her intense sexual desire the way it was described in this story is the ultimate bliss for not only her but him equally. Actually for both of them simultaneously. Her willing surrender of herself to her mate is her greatest expression of her love for him and his intense effort to bring her to her orgasm is his recognition of her love. The transfer of his love cream from him to her and her willing acceptance of that love cream is testament to their mutual love for one another. Just a great love story.

Great story. I love how you put a unique spin on a standard story.

Nice simple story well told

Good story, but why end it like that? You could have let them explore each other over the course of the weekend: first oral, first doggie, first cowgirl. So much potential lost. Of course it's still open for a chapter 2.