All Comments on 'Swerve'

Very nicely done. The combination of despair and hope, ability and disability works very well. Thank you

This story is not romantic in the least. We know next to nothing about his supposed love other than the fact that he thinks she's hot. Oh and she is apparently ultra smart. We skip months of what could be emotional build up for their relationship only to have her suddenly kissing him breaking her code of ethics for no apparent reason. Even everything that happens after. He never says why he likes her just that he thinks she's beautiful. We never see why she likes him she just comes off as trying to prove a point that psychologically he can have some weird form of mental orgasm. There is no real feel of closeness between the characters because we know nothing about them together. From a readers perspective they go from Dr/client to in bed together in two paragraphs with 0 explanation. You're hot and you're a broken toy I can still play with is the feeling I get out of this story.

Good story!

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Well done. Thank you.