All Comments on 'Swimsuit Sex'

Great story that should have rated a Five. However I had to rate it a four because unlike most authors here who provide too little detail and elaboration you used so many long drawn out sentences with too many "ands", "buts" and descriptive phrases that I often found myself feeling rushed and losing track of the erotic sexual scenes which are the purpose of the story. I do hope that this constructive criticism proves to be helpful.