by StativaBaby
how does that count as incest? and where's the thrill of the taboo in that?
even though it's not "real" incest I found the overall style of the writing and shifting viewpoint to be really interesting. More over the vivid descriptions of everything going on and the set up for more to be written leaves me not only wanting more but actually intrigued by what could happen next.
gave you a 5. Forget the English teacher and the annony. fools keep writing!!
Story got me on tha Oliver Twist state-of-mind, all I can ask for is more of the same
I liked your story up to the point of "You filthy fuck doll ..." Takes it right out of erotica and into misogyny for me. The anal rape? What a wasted opportunity for some hot writing.
Perhaps this belongs in non-consent rather than incest.