All Comments on 'Take a Hike'

lovely. Thank you.

I thought, given the trail of black hair she saw from his navel to his waistband, that she'd find an impressive covering of chest hair across his upper chest, swirling between the throat and his pecs. Bring on Chapter 2 and give Evan some chest hair for Zoe to play with!

The character building was solid, their interactions were 'real,' and the fact that they ended up together the way they did didn't feel forced in the slightest. You kept their physical descriptions vague while making it apparent that they're both attractive people; very well done.

The only beef I have with this story is that there isn't a whole lot going on from the male perspective. The way she felt in his arms, her fresh, feminine scent, the way she made him feel, etc.. I reccomend finding a male author/editor who will help you fill in those blanks. It'll add another dimension of "realism" to your story.

One last point: This was a very technically sound piece. None of the usual grammatical errors or misused words. Your effort shines through and I thank you for sharing with the rest of us.

Can we please have another chapter please as I have to know what happened next I love these two