All Comments on 'Take It'

This was a tremendously well written story of a young man really coming into his own. If you develop it, I'd like to know how he got to that night and whether there are any hopes for a relationship to emerge from such an intense sexual encounter. Great work! Keep writing! A sequel please!

I'm going to agree with the previous response and say this is a good first effort. For what it's worth; you covered a lot of emotional ground in a very short story. The sexual erotica was good, but you might consider slowing down the action just a bit in order to fully explore the inner emotions of the young sub-boi (perhaps you can do some additional chapters on this if you think you have more to say about his feelings). You touched on these emotions a bit, but readers want to really get to "know" the characters and relate to them and their true desires. Keep writing!

Well done. Do it again.....please?....

Hey- to everyone who commented- thank you very very much.

I am writing the prequel the mornings events and I'm hoping that you guys will comment on that when I post it.

Thanks again

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although I'm not much of an ass man myself(but will)

thought it was nice.

I am a female and enjoyed readin your story. it was fantastic, hope you write more

Wow, this is a great story! I've had the same fantasy for years. Very well done.