by Kyriae
And here comes the "but", your grammar needs some work. Nothing serious enough to distract me, or prevent me from finishing the story. The inconsistent verb tense is mildly irritating. Find a good editor for the next one.
Part 2 is in the works and im going to try to get it finished and uploaded by end of the week
Awesome debut, Kyriae! Don't stop now. Keep 'em coming. Maybe part deux?
-Micahael