All Comments on 'Taking What's His Pt. 02'

Very nice continuation! I thought it was interesting how she's afraid but her body is reacting the opposite way. I'm excited to read the next one!

"I can taste it, her cherry." That's just terrible writing. Also, where is the character development? I feel no attachment to either of them. She doesn't try to scream or fight? She just willing accepts his "dominance" over her? Here's to hoping this story gets better!!

I'm not sure why you have a few negative reviews. You write well and I enjoy the storyline. Although, if your going to continue with this story perhaps make it longer or post a chapter more than once a month. Please continue the good work!

Good job writing! I think that it could use a little more character development. Should she be fighting him more? She really had no reason to be scared of him except for his size and scissors there isn't anything too scary about him.

I think it would be more realistic if she fought more. If she does this then it gives him a reason to spank her and then she can be scared.

If you need someone to proofread then let me know!

-Innocent Venus

I wrote this right after the first chapter but it kept getting sent back. I did a bunch of editing and it finally got posted so yay!! Hopefully I'll have better luck with this next chapter being accepted. To those who were kind, thanks for the lovely comments y'all! I really appreciate it. :)

Innocent Venus, thanks so much for the offer! I might have to take you up on that!! :)

Hi! Just so you know, when you use the saying "The lady doth protests too much" it means that someone is protesting too much for someone who doesn't like it. Ie. "Oh my God you like Danny!" "Shut up, no I don't! He's not even that cute, and his hair is way too floppy. How could you say that? You're so gross. He's gross too. Ugh." In that situation, if they really didn't like Danny it would make sense that they say, "No I don't, that's gross," and be done with it. So the first situation is when you would say "Methinks the lady doth protest too much.'

If someone doesn't protest at all it is an inappropriate time to use that.

I like the kidnapping premise :) keep writing please!