All Comments on 'Tales of a Lesbian Air Hostess Ch. 01'

That was very enjoyable, and I had great images in my head for both of you. I look forward to reading more; thank you for sharing!

Great story idea (annoyed that I've had the same kind of idea myself, but not written it yet).

But the writing is a bit off.... The first thing which stuck out was the "encapsulate", that Anonymous picked up on in the comment below. Then there are others.

One thing about writing in the first person: only that person's sensations can be known, not anyone else's. "Then I moved on to suck her aching nipples..." but we only have Charlotte's point of view, and she can't know they are aching.