All Comments on 'Talla's Fallen Temple Ch. 12'

Well that's certainly suspicious behavior. But then, the whole temple is just full of secrets and lies, like a house of cards that's about to fall down around their ears.

and the twisted goings on of the temple, I am waiting to see how it all pulls together. How are all these characters going to help Talla and Zhairlo? I'm sure everything is going according to your plan but to me it seems like we've drifted away from the main idea of the story.

I am enjoying the writing as always, I just wish the storyline could move along a bit more quickly. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Hope you don't leave us waiting too long.

I.

NEED.

MOAR.

NAO!

Okay, not really.

But I'd LIKE more quickly. This is damn good.

And if you'll pardon the terribad pun, I think you're a disciple in Within, because my head has been drawn into this.

Several chapters back, you mentioned the irony of erotica requiring appendices. I think that I'm probably not the only one who started reading this story because it was erotica but have become genuinely interested in these characters and this world. For me, this story is up there with "The Preacher Man" or "Angels, Demons, and Alex", the latter of which was taken down from Literotica and published online. Another thing that kind of intrigues me is that I get the sense that this story can't possibly be resolved in 12 more chapters. Fallen Temple is feeling more like the second book in a trilogy rather than the ending of a duology. Also, it seems like some characters from Book 1 have fallen off along the way, such as Sila or Shanata. In any event, I'm not here for the sex anymore. I'm here because you've created a page-turner.

I'll grant that much. I really thought that I could have finished the story I wanted to tell, of Talla and Zhair'lo, in one book. I think, now, as you do, that it will take three to get where I meant to go.

After all, we've stuck with you so far, right? You must be doing something properly!

(Well, a lot of things, actually, but you get my point.)

I appreciate the communication.

And I'm so glad you're patient with my rate of progress. I'd like to dedicate more time to my writing but I have to work with what I have.

Thanks again.

@XavierTorch

(P.S. Chapter 13 has been submitted. I'm writing 14.)