All Comments on 'Talon Ch. 04'

I'm so glad you decided to continue with this story. The characters are well developed and the storyline is very interesting. Keep up the great work and update soon.

Awsome chapter, looking forward to next

I'm really glad you are back. I loved this story the first time. Now that I have revisited it I can't wait for the next chapter.

You have a very nice story here and this is a good addition to it. If you don't find an editor, I'm willing to volunteer. liz-518@hotmail.com Send me an email if you like. But either way, I can't wait for your next chapter.

I was glad to see this story continued. I like the characters and your plot seems well-thought-out.

As for the editor... You did better this time with the grammar and spelling without the editor. Your previous editor(s) couldn't seem to keep up with the correct homophones. Just because the word sounds correct and the spell-check says it is spelled correctly does not mean that it is the correct word. To/too and grown/groan were a distracting problem in the previous posts. This chapter was much better.

I'm so glad to see this new chapter. It fits in seamlessly with the others. I think you did great without an editor. I'm eagerly anticipating the next installment.

The story itself was good, but it clearly lacked the polish of the second chapter. Sure, the punctuation was better than the first, but the raging misuse of homonyms is back, my friends. Fallow and follow, bolder and boulder, pail and pale just to name a few. Also, for most of the story, Talon was either chasing a red werewolf or one that wore blush. Hard to tell. "Rouge" was by far more prevalent than "rogue." The devil is in the details, and the constant errors were a distraction. NOT better without the editor.

write longer

Its a good story line,just a bit too short.And if they have a spell checker it would be handy to use one,,its "follow" not fallow,otherwise,an interesting story,ty

...but this Trevor is one sick puppy (if you'd pardon the pun)

You should give us more details about what Rick looks like as a wolf.

Watch the spelling.:)

FOLLOW,NOT FALLOW