by Charles Petersunn
...Continue it! You spent a lot of time on your Lesson's stories, which are really for a certain type of reader, but don't seem to continue your other stories even with lots of positive feedback. Do all of your readers a favor and continue some of these stories that have such good starts!
Should have been chapter 22 of The Lessons, which are your forte. The boy/girl interactions and "discoveries" re: sex are your best work, although the pillory was damn hot. Anyway, more Lessons, please... some of the chapters left things "dangling".
Very good story line...I like the longer stories,,, this one needs more chapters...I liked the Knight and Princess...
I have not read any of your Lesson Series but I like the
way you write...
I felt like I was reading a story about young kids playing doctor "you show me yours, I'll show you mine"...both of the characters should have been made a little more mature...you can have inexperience without dumbing it down.
hey there, i really enjoyed the story, the pace was ace. the only thing that let it down was the way the characters call each other knight and princess - i think it shows they are too naive and this is a bit of a come down.
otherwise, wicked ;o)