by betweenthesheets
Would that be "trance"?
Far too many errors!
Get yourself an Editor!!
Great story. Mistakes happen to everyone. Don't listen to the idiot haters. Some people just nitpick because they feel like they have to bring other people work down. I didn't even notice any errors while reading, so there weren't that many.
man that was great
i am an editor and i didn't even notice the work trance till that ass call you on it so dont worry bout it haha all up GREAT STORY and loved it keep up the good work
I lose my concentration on your story every time you use dam instead of damn, or cloths instead of clothes, or waste instead of waist. spell check is great but it's a pain when the word when misspelled is another correct word. The comment about an editor is right on, they are available to help.
Your story Ideas are good and with a little polish from an editor will get you the 4 and 5 stars.