All Comments on 'Teenage Fantasy Ch. 04'

I really wish the education system wasn't as portrayed here. I don't think it is most of the time, but sometimes, unfortunately it is.

Fantastic work. Each chapter just keeps getting better. Your character work and plotting is really constructed well, your characters especially have such specific and strong voices. Well done

It's absolutely beautiful. Thank you for your story.

So we'll done. I can't wait to read the next part but take all the time you need to get it right. Please consider writing more after you finish this story!

Excellent story, characters, and writing. Looking forward to the finish, and more of your work. Well done!

Spectacular story, honestly some of the best writing on the site. I hope you have other stories to write, because this has been an amazing ride.

This is amazing work. And, please, don't worry about the delay. I'd much rather have your best than have something fast that you don't feel good about. You're literally giving this fabulous gift to all of us. Not only that, by releasing your writing to us, you're exposing a raw nerve. I appreciate the work, which I had the pleasure of rereading from the beginning with this release, and I admire your bravery. Take whatever time you need...but not forever, okay? I like these characters too much and I'd be crushed if I never got to spend any more time with them.

This was one of the best!! You have a real talent for building a story and creating real life characters. I'm glad that I came across this story only about 3 weeks ago. I didn't have to wait a long time to continue reading the follow on chapters that many of the readers had to wait for when they were hooked on the story. After you finish this high school romance please continue writing as you are an exceptional writer!

Wow

Thank you guys! I didn't realize the story had posted! I did submit to LaRascasse so I should be providing much needed edits soon. But I am so happy that this part resonated with you all. I was nervous to post it because of the content and it's not the most exciting erotic scene so I'm happy it went over well. Thank you all!

I have read all four of the current chapters and I must say I really enjoyed the very realistic drama featured in your story. You have a gift for bringing out the emotional experiences of your story with your style of writing and puts us in the moments you are describing. So far Chapter 1 hooked my interest while Chapter 4 was clearly the most gifted of your writings so far in this story. I am very much looking forward to reading your concluding chapter!

Can not wait for more

Honestly I believe you could turn this into a book and it would become a bestseller. I am so in love with the characters. This chapter was more than I could have imagined. Whatever life throws at you, don't stop writing, you are truly talented!

just when I think you've taken this story as far as you can, you show me how very wrong I am. this chapter is simply amazing as you develop so much more depth into not only the 2 main characters but also those surrounding them in such a way that really enhances the story, pulling your readers deeper and making them feel as much a part of the story as you yourself are. I really appreciate you sharing not only your amazing talent, but also your devotion of your time spent, effort, research and resources to bring us along this journey.

James Duncan I recognize that it's risky to showcase the education system as much but it is an obstacle that they face together and as teens it's their environment. I hope that it doesn't take too much away from the story for you. Thank you for reading!!

Thank you Anonymous I am so glad that the characters are resonating with you and that you enjoy the story so much!

Katsusik tha j you for reading!!

Thank you Anonymous I appreciate the understanding and am so glad you enjoy the story!!

Thank you Jubal!! I'm thrilled that you enjoy the story so far!!

Corranhorn I appreciate it! I'm happy you've enjoyed the ride this far!

Swebo I truly appreciate your response. I admit that I did kind of seclude myself which wasn't fair to the readers, but I hope that I can continue to put out work that some people may enjoy! Thank you also for being on this journey and I am so glad that the story has resonated with you!

Just a great series and cant wait to read more of this story ,You really did well !!!

The chapters are long and fantastic each time so it’s understandable that it takes a while for a new one, though I hope to read the next very soon because I’ve been keeping up with this saga since the beginning and it was TORTURE to wait so long😭Nonetheless I’m happy that I’ve found this series on here as it is one of my favorites and am excited for more.

Best chapter to date! My only problem is I don't see how a single chapter can possibly wrap up all the plot lines without rushing through the finale and leaving all of us empty. There's the championship game, Mabel's mother, Jake passing his senior year, Mabel fighting for valedictorian, Mabel getting accepted to a top college and may Jake gets a scholarship at the same one. I could go on but you get the point. You have a lot of work yet to do! LOL! 4.8*

PS - I see you respond to reader's comments in this section. I read hundreds of tales here and NEVER go back to look if the author responded to my comments. (I don't delude myself into thinking my comments are that important - LOL!) I do. however, get emails from authors telling me their thoughts on my comments. I've even started editing for some of them as a result.

I also keep up with your story from the beginning saving part 1 to my favourites to be able to read it again and to check if more is posted.

I now read all 4 parts after each other and I love the story. I love American high school dramas very much in general and the sex

But with part 4 I am especially surprised that you are writing about Dislexia. Both my kids are dislectic and it is a daily struggle for me and my husband to help them in the educational system that is so focused on reading and writing papers.

I am looking forward to the final part and I want to see them succeeding 😀

You are very talented and I am emotionally invested in these two-and have continually checked back for this next chapter. Thanks for not bailing on us!

This chapter was too stressful-I am still mad days later! Please have this be a happily ever after!

Too many bad things and mean people are happening to these two. I am going to need a lot of karma happening.!!!

Great story, wonderfully told. But don’t make up spellings - trachea is that part of the throat, okay?

It just cannot end here...!!

Please keep going, they need each other, and Jake's mom needs grandbabies! 10 STARS!!

I really REALLY want to see the rest of this. Please, soon.

Wow the details and depth of the story are excellent. Can't wait for the follow-up!

This is one of the best I've read on here so far. It makes me want to write better characters. Keep up the good work. If this was published in paperback I think it would be a hit.

Thank you so much for writing this amazing story. I love the non-sex elements a lot, it really helps me get attached even more to Jake and Mabel.

One of the many things that stood out to me was the scene with the bathroom mirror, where Jake was counting down to Mabel's orgasms. I also love the general variety of characters, the almost scary bathroom incident with Tonya, and Mabel's ultra cute relationship with Jake's parents. Mabel is exactly the kind of "daughter-in-law" I try to be!

I could go on for a while about how much I love this story. Mabel being a better school counselor for Jake than any member of faculty for instance, and how she vowed to help him with his dyslexia.

Thanks so much for bringing this story into the world. Regardless of what happens next, these 4 chapters have been a huge gift. Thank you.

Really liked how the story and the characters are being fleshed out, to the point it's not a smut story series, but a very well written coming- of- age series.

Jake's dyslexia reminds me of a 2007 Indian movie 'Taare Zameen Par' (Stars on Earth), where a young upbeat kid named Ishaan gets beaten around for his 'insolent' behaviour (often derided by his dad and the school teachers, like in Jake's case) for not studying, much to both his parents frustration, despite having difficulties in deciphering the numbers and letters. He is shown to be a wonderful painter as his imagination runs amok. The only people who cares for him is his older brother (whom he gets compared to as he is an overachiever in the family) and mother. He's later being sent to the boys hostel to 'shape him up for the society'.

Then way later into the movie's length duration, a sub teacher by the name of Ram Shankar Nikumbh comes into the class with a bang (complete with a banging song ofc!) and politely encounters Ishaan at his worst point in his life (he is completely numb at this point), after being incessantly admonished by the teachers, and derogatory terms being tossed at him. He later dives into the problem and understands that Ishaan is dyslexic. He later visits his parents' home to discuss the fact to them that Ishaan is dyslexic, and how improper treatment for not meeting to arbitrary standards can detrimentally impact a child's self esteem. He can also relate to Ishaan to a T as he too is dyslexic. After requesting the school authority to make adjustment for Ishaan, Nikumbh starts teaching him alphabets and numbers using physical senses (just like how Mabel taught Jake orally) and in a playful manner. He is then able to write the letters and numbers and can form a coherent sentence flawlessy. Honestly, this is such a wonderful movie, packed with a rollercoaster of emotions, that you'll be overwhelmed by watching it at the end. It teaches us the difference in human beings and how a parent should love a child unconditionally. Sorry for spoiling this movie. I can't mark spoiler in this website.

Honestly, Jake's parent should have dove further regarding his conditions instead of brushing it aside. And shame on those teachers.

I hope that both Mabel and Jake get throught the hurdles on the way with flying colours, strengthening their relationship further. I hope that both of them gets their happy ending.

Take time in writing the final chapter, if it's what you've planned.

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Where’s the next part? I have patience but it’s been 4 months

Completely out of character Mabel would cut school.

She set herself a goal of getting Jake to pass and they only have two weeks.

She wouldn't risk Jake's grades for that.

p.s. there's no such thing as an AP Trig class.

At last he realizes he doesn't have to punish her. He has to handle his anger and not take it out on her.

Why not have her mother's boyfriend -- agent and lawyer? -- go after the school for failing to diagnose his dyslexia. Force them to give him the accommodations he should have gotten for years, Let this be a way for her to reunite with her mother as the boyfriend brings Jake and Mable to openly express their love. And, with allowing him to have books read to him, he'll excel academically as well as on the field. Let them be boyfriend and girlfriend openly. Make the bastards at school -- students and faculty -- suffer. Let her go to MIT and let him go to a good, but not top-tier football school. Boston College or some other in the MIT area. And then they'll get their HEA. And the school system should have to pay him and his family big bucks to avoid an horrendous lawsuit. Justice and love.

I love this series! And I, like others keep coming back to check for more parts, but I don't want you to feel rushed. This is honestly art! So therefore it's a process I'm sure!

But I was wondering if anyone had any recomendations for stories like this? That kind of romance but dirty, character development and passion filled narrative that we all fell in love with here?