All Comments on 'Ten Little Bimbos Ch. 01'

The story requires a bit more attention than usual, but it's rewarding enough if you put some thought into it. I think it';s an ambitious project, and I've enjoyed what I've read so far. A couple points:

- You keep calling Joan "the black detective". Once or twice was enough. It's not like you call Sam "the white strip club owner", or Tori "the female hotel owner".

- The detail about "the natives" was a little bit uncomfortable. I don't know your politics, but presuming you have some basic interest in avoiding racist story elements, I would consider at least highlighting that the tribes' practices aren't noticeably different from the local law enforcement's (after all, we have a sitting judge who bimbifies criminals). By default and without context, it just comes across as a needless "nonwhite natives raping white women" stereotype.

Really looking forward to the next chapter! :)

Keep it up!

Thoughful writing. Erotic even without any actual sex.