by YDB95
A wonderful story! You did a surper job telling it aslo. I will now have to find more of your work.
Toomany people in the first few lines. Too confusing, gave up right there.
I really enjoyed the mix of heterosexual and homosexual relationships in this story. Definitely one of your better stories and I would definitely pick it to win the contest.
That was difficult to get into and difficult to follow. Choppy writing style hurt the overall storyline. The awful characters hurt it worse. In the end you failed to capture my attention and failed to entertain.
1 star