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DianeRedfernDianeRedfernalmost 8 years ago
Some good ideas but please slow it down

There are some very erotic thoughts and action but very little in the way of feelings. This makes the pacing much too rapid. The narrator goddess tells us little of what's inside her head and we get no feel of what's in Lolita's head, just the action and the commands. Ironic, since tender is in the title but TLC is just what this story needs. Keep writing and thanks for sharing but try slowing the pace and letting the readers in more next time.

CherieMCherieMalmost 8 years ago
Lovely

Lucky Lolita xxxx

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