All Comments on 'Thanksgiving in Sacramento'

I don't know what planet your main character is on, but all the guys I know (and I'm one of them) absolutely love giving "face" to their women...

I'm sorry but up until that point you had a rapt audience. Editing out that part would make the story just as hot, like "Most guys enjoy getting their girls off with their tongue, but I absolutely love it!" or something like that.

Negative comments about a gender's assumed preferences shouldn't have place in an erotic story.

Keep writing though, your style is easy to read and the visuals are strong!