All Comments on 'That Old House'

I enjoyed this as a more romantic novella as the romantic parts were not that overtly graphic but a very good, well woven story.

Awesome story. What category? Is it supernatural or romance? I think it is both with emphasis on romance. TTT, you are one helluva writer. One of the best. It was a strange story but very enjoyable. Only the ending was not very clear. Who were those malevolent entities? How were they there? How were they kicked out? Well, all's well that ends well, I guess. In life Bev might have lasted a few more years. But now she can stay with them for as long as she wants. Ditto for Mary. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

The ending was confusing to me. Maybe because I am easily confused. Regardless, GREAT story. Since 5 is the limit, 5⭐.

Best story I've ever read in here ⭐🌟✨🌟⭐

Amazing! Just when I think you can't get better, I read another one that is. This one is great. When I get over the emotions of this first time, I will re-read and enjoy again.

Really enjoyed this ghost story. Nice ending. Kept me reading until the end.

Was a very nice story I enjoyed all parts of it , 5 stars , it kept me glued to it page by page , Very Well Done

Extraordinary fabulous performance with your pen ….. this tale has bestseller status and the idea characters scenery just name it made this tale a ten star one 🙏

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A truly Gothic horror story. What a vivid classic film it would make? More positive than 'Fall of the House of Usher' and 'Annabelle Lee'...

Outstanding in every aspect of an absorbing tale. Could have read more if more was available especially with explainations as to

developing new family...5 stars..JZK

knowing this as a long story already as good tale takes time to unfold,a sequel would be a bonus if it is written in context and as well as the story already told written.Not just for the sake of a sequence..

Outstanding. Love to read more about this family.

Reread this and my God I wish I could give you another 5 star rating. Simply awesome

Maybe a sequel, explaining the original haunting...like one of the soldiers who died, a love unrequited or something?

Loved it

Took me a while to finish the story, so, what happened to the fire? Bev kicked their ass...all good however; why were they so mad at the world why didn't they leave?

My gosh. What a classic tale of good over evil and the Supreme sacrifice it took to saved loved ones.

Nicer writings than just cheating and BTB.

Thank you for a memorable chilling romance.

Not as poetic but gothically in spirit with Edgar Allan Poe.

An amazing and powerfully-written story in any setting but even more so in an erotic one. You are a good writer.

I confess I was and still am a bit confused at the bewildering ending, which seems to suddenly leap forward too fast after the much more measured and structured pace of the bulk of the narrative. No explanation of any sort is given of 'the malevolence' or of the other members of the original family, which is disappointing, even if it does supply the element of mystery. This part could perhaps be rewritten a little?

I enjoyed the story a lot, but the climax felt a little sudden and anticlimactic. Great work overall.

Look, I love this story, but as I tell my mate who reckons he's seen multiple ghosts and poltergeist, why does it not shock your world view. If I had seen something that science could not explain I would spend my life trying to find answers, not merrily continue on like it never really happened.

Lapsed catholic, non believing protestant and the only properly religious living person is now dead and a ghost.

I do not agree with religion, but accept peoples faith, but as a non believer if I experienced the super natural this would scare the living crap outta me. Oh, random malcontent poltergeist can kill me and there's nothing I can do about it, I'm noping the fuck away.

Really gotta feel for Karen as well, 2 people living in your house that everyone else in your family except you can see, talk to and experience, and one of them sucks off your husband on the reg and keeps putting her photo in your bedroom. Shiiiiiite.

This should become a movie...

Just an excellent story/

It’s now my 4th time reading this story. Still one of the best on Lit, but wish you had stretched out the end a bit more. Seems rushed. 5-stars.

Great story from an equally great storyteller. 👍 I love it

One of my absolute favorite stories! Well done.

Great story TTT, and a great ending too! Thanks :)

Good job, thanks for sharing your work! I loved that you submitted this as 1 story/post, instead of 4 stories with 4 pages ea. I loved this story ❤.

Just wonderful. A real delight

I was so into this story I read it again the same day! Well done!

Top notch. This is a beautiful story. I don't have adequate words to express how much I love it.

WOW. Just WOW.

Love it!

That ending was a great twist. What a fabulous imagination you have.

2nd reading and just a "Masterpiece" of a story.

Another great tail nice twist at the end ...3 hours :)

Just fuckin' awesome!

Read it all in a couple of hours. Enjoyed it very much . Thank You

I cannot express to you enough how well you wrote the ending (including the epilogue). I was on the edge of my seat feeling all of the emotions! I think this story was the perfect length and you wrote very neatly (there were few, if any, needless words).. this story was epic. Have a lovely day!

Two things. First I absolutely loved the story, the setting, the characters, and the plot. It seemed as though you rushed the last half a page or so starting when you fast forward to the family and kids etc. In spite of this, your story definitely deserves a much wider audience than this site can offer. Which brings me to my second point. You need to publish this in a print form and get busy writing writing prequels that center around each time the house burns down and why.

Please continue this one day following the kids! Or please make a story with an albino girl, models like Nastya Zhidkova got me interested but the character of Nienke "Iana" Meijer and her thick ass got me really into it. Too little eroticas have sexy albino girls.

This is a great read love it and the ending was amazing

Only my second 5 ⭐ rating. Well deserved. Someday, a sequel or even a prequel would be fantastic. Thanks for this story in any event.

Excellent, thank you 😊

This is so much more than a five-star story...SSSOOO MUCH MORE!!! You deserve Some kind of recognition for writing this, because...because...because...

You made me 😢 CRY!!! AND, CRY HARD!! I react to stories like this, because of the emotion generated by the words, and by the investment of the writer in the story.

Obviously, maybe, you have experienced at least *something* like this, at some level. I most appreciate that the sexual aspects were dealt with so maturely (maybe Karen would not agree!!??) At the start, I knew Mary was the one taking care of him...opening/closing doors, moving things, pleasuring him at odd times...And, it was so enjoyable to move on to where MC realizes what is happening.

Plus, when Bev gets caught in her conversation with Mary, he figures out she knows; really, the anger response was QUITE unwarranted...should have felt more relief, and a sense of gratitude that they could converse and help each other with the house, the malevolence...

I ESPECIALLY like how Bev is still present, with Mary...and active!!

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Great story - could even have had a longer ending without any problems.

Beautiful. Bit long though, skimmed a couple of pages.

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Great for multiple rereads!

You have just enough 'build-up/background' to be entertaining and not overwhelming even at 13 pages.

11/10!!!!!

This is the one of the best story i have read so far... Thanks for this work

only thru page 10 but had to jot down my thought quickly. Beware and stay out of the attic on the anniversary of the fire, or the entire hose or have a large fire extinguisher handy.

That Old House is definitely one of the very best stories I've had the pleasure of reading. Truly, a fun read! I loved it!

You write wonderfully.

As good a story as I've read on here.

Well done.

I have read hundreds of stories on this site and this by far is the best I have read. Thanks so much for the escape from reality for a while.

I absolutely freaking loved this❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️.. I was most happy to read that Jack Karen and Bev made a home again out of that house, that Mary was accepted and loved and that the evil that cost her n her little girl their lives was finally vanquished by Mary herself ,very very fitting .. that Bev, on her passing stayed to keep the family safe and that the house was finally complete... I couldn't start cooking my Sunday lunch without completing those last three chapters... Looking forward to more like this...

This needs so many more chapters... 5stars

This is gold thought i was reading a web novel if you can expand the story more and make a short novel with It id be first in line to buy it.

All I can say is AWESOME!!!

This was just delightful. I wish the end had been fleshed out a little more as it seemed very abrupt but overall it was just fantastic.

Did Bev make Jake her primary heir? What happened to the rest of the stuff in the hidden hearth where the jewelry was found?

Lots of unanswered questions but I really enjoyed this whole tale.

Loverd this story, overall. Fleshing out he bad poltergeist, (so to speak), and Karen's reaction would be the masterstroke to make this a best seller - hell maybe tweak it to make her an active partner giving energy as well, instead of having her left out. After all, she's already enjoyed it several times, & sure she would have just as great a relationship with Mary! It'd make more sense they'd be a supernatural poly & make for a happier ending. 😊

You should definitely see about publishing this in general, too! Then watch the royalties roll in!

By the middle of it, I stoped playing with myself and read. It was an amazing tale. Congrats. And thank you.

great story up until the last page -the ending was rushed and left too many questions unanswered.

I stop by and read this now and again. I am always finding little snippets that I missed

For my money there is not another tale out to top this

I love the story.

If I had any complaints it was that I a would have wanted more of the main story (after the fight) before jumping to the epilogue (for example see how Karen reacted to the news that were ghosts and that he was “seeing” Mary).

However, that’s minor compared to the rest of the story.

Who were the bad guys? You never said. And, how exactly did Bev die?

Great story!!! Even got a little misty eyed.

Hi I know I’m just one in a sea of commenters but can I say I love how this story is both erotic and beautiful. Please do something like this about lonely vampire sisters in a castle with a tragic backstory. Or even continuing this world I’d love it. I just happen to love vampires. You know what this story reminds me of? The Graveyard Book. One of if not my favourite novel and another beautiful haunting story about ghosts.

Brilliantly written,great emotional content,believable and well rounded characters who truly engaged my sympathy. As an added bonus the steamier side of things didn't feel contrived which can often be the case with takes like this. In a way I do agree with the slightly rushed feel towards the end, in fact I felt this story could very well stand up to becoming a series. I'd love to read about their life leading on from Bev's sacrifice. Will definitely be checking out the rest of your work!

Great story, and really great writing. It was hard to gloss over as your writing style made it very easy to want to read every word. My only criticism, the ending feels rushed, but all in all an excellent offering!

Amazing story loved every part of an emotional sap during most of it could stop reading it. Just wished it was longer so I could continue reading it😊

Agree with some other commenters. Utterly amazing plot concept, but felt rushed at the end with the other ghosts

Beautiful and touching story.

Great for 12 pages or so.

Ending was rushed.

Absolutely fantastic. Read it all in one go, I couldn’t put it down. By page 13 I started to read slower as I couldn’t bear for it to end. Just about to read everything else you’ve written. Thank you so much for sharing this piece of literary magnificence with us all.

Great story, could not stop, read all 15 chapters straight thru!

the ending was a little hard to stomach

What did ya say

"This is my first foray into Erotic Horror. Although there are horror/evil elements, in the end it's a romance, with a heavy paranormal theme. I wasn't sure if this went in Erotic Horror, Non-human, or Romance. Let me know if I got it wrong."

Right your first story in 'Erotic-Horror' is

#1 in erotic horror hall of fame

And I'd say you deserve it

Although the readers(including me) are most likely perverts

This story is mind blowing

Great story Thank you.

What a wonderful story. Such well-crafted characters. Just a touch of the supernatural. And well integrated to the story. Wow wow wow.

This was a great story!!

Absolutely incredible.

First rate

A riveting tale !

Thank you for sharing ,

Thank you for the great story. . A lot people here want to just jack off and not really have, visualize, or take part of any story that is not exclusively erotic. More foreshadowing would be delightful, thank you!

Wow you blab on and on about work and nonsense but when you get to the meat we get half page. We all knew the tragedy that would happen. You could have left out a lot of stuff and put in a good fights over several weeks or whatever. Now he has a woman that don’t sound like she will stay in the long run. Should have brought up Mary way earlier. Great story until about page 8-10. This is when he should have brought up Mary. The end didn’t gratify waiting for reveal. Sorry

Great story but wish you would let him told girls about Mary when he gave the gifts. Telling them while they were fussing over keeping the jewelry would have been a bigger impact. Let them know then why they had to keep each piece would have been great. Then when he found out about the danger he should have convinced Mary it was time.. Very least he should have been having conversation with Mary about showing them. It just feels like you’re dragging it out to make the story longer. Really not much happening story wise just filler stuff. The middle section should be condensed. Good story just needlessly long

I cried. Full on sobbing. Just thinking about my spirit here. How sad and angry he always is. I just want to help but he doesn't like me. I wish I couls help them get to where they need to go. Good night. 3:19 AM Eastern Standard Time

Great story. Very well written unlike most other stories in this site. You could definitely extend this story to create a book. There are some flaws though. As many other users pointed out the ending is rushed and a lot of the readers questions are left unanswered. If you tied up those loose ends, provided more details on the characters and their backstories and further explained Karen's and Jack's relationship you will have a great story.

Great story, ot should be published!

Oh my goodness. This is the first story on this site which ive EVER wanted to comment on. I honestly can't get over how incredible it was to read this; I absolutely was not expecting there to be any sort of horror in this one, but you did it SO WELL. Mary's desperation to keep everyone away from the third floor, and Jack's sheer determination was so fucking palpable.

The ensuing conflict and the comfort which the two of them took from each other was intense, and sweet.

I would've have loved to read more of this, it was so fun and interesting to read. Definitely the best story I've read in a looooong time. Well done!

It got me hooked from the beginning. Wonderfully written!!!!

Once I started reading this story I just had to read to the finish. Not sure I like how Karen was not able to participate in the love of the two house guests. I'm thinking it would be a huge strain on their marriage that could possibly end it. Think of the terror she went through and not be able to understand those happenings. The rest of the story was outstanding and had me teary-eyed at the appropriate places. Thanks for a five star story.

Love the "sex" with Mary, although wanting more. Like maybe Mary could solidify enough for Jack to lick her... urhm... little bean, and provide some oral pleasure... or

hold her throughout a whole session and fell asleep with her in his arms like he mentioned to her.

Like the other reader, I also prefer Mary way more than Karen. Not sure why, but I don't like Karen much. I kinda wish and was hoping that Karen either:

1. Be a major b1tch and cheated on Jack so he kicked her out of his life, and Mary would mend his broken heart with even more BJs.

2. Couldn't take the craziness and just left Jack & Bev & The House, for good; OR

3 Somehow just died outside the house so her spirit wouldn't be in the house. Like an accident or died from childbirth.

Knew from the start it was Mary giving him treats during the 1st & 2nd night with Karen

And yes, Jack should say " I love you" and more often to Mary especially when he considered Mary his first girl initially and Karen second.

I think maybe I just don't get it why Jack loved Karen sooo much when they hardly knew each other because she hasn't really done anything substantial, apart from taking care of Beth which was her job. I guess I believe in Lust at first sight more than love at first sight.

Just excellent...i also skimmed past the sex... Great story...

-jaye-

Great story! The only thing I felt was missing is that Jack never said, "I love you" to Mary, and she didn't say that to him. I really fell in love with Mary more than Karen, and felt that Jack and Mary's relationship could have been more romantic and based more on love than just constant sex.

Has to be the best story I've read in a long time. The creativity here kept me so engrossed. Couldn't stop start to finish. Thanks for writing. 5 stars and wish it could be more.

What an amazing story! You are an excellent writer. I could not stop reading!!!!!

Sometimes, but very often, I found myself skipping the sex and jumping to the rest of the story. Too good, too short.

I read it today and have to comment before I forget. Best story I have read up to my 64th birthday. Anything after that I don't remember. Maybe if I read it every day for a week I will remember it. I am going to read all of your stories now.

The horror element was so well incorporated, I was very positively surprised. Most "horror" themes simply involve sexual encounters with ghosts/related paranormal entities; which aren't scary, on their own. But you introduced a real threat, one feared by all of the occupants, both living and non. There was real danger, along with some pretty tense moments.

I love your attention to details. Your characters felt real, and so did the house. It reminded me of "home". I grew up in a 200 yr old Victorian, not so far from your story's setting. Lots of crazy things happened there. Although I was ripped off on the ghost sex front, we definitely weren't alone there.

I would love to know more about this home's history, and possibly find out where the malevolent spirits came from. Even with so much detail already written, the history of the house would be a story worth reading, all on it's own.

This is one of the best works I've ever read!

The brilliance is simply divine!

Please, keep on writing, and you'll make it.

Thank you!

Fantastic! Thank you for sharing your amazing talent for storytelling.

You have a wonderful talent, thank you for this lovely story. I hope you continue, and consider publication.if at all possible.