All Comments on 'The Accident'

You have a magical way with words. I truly enjoy reading each and every story you have here.

I have, in the past commented as anonymous. Not anymore. Because of your works, I have joined Literotica so that I can list you as one of my favorite authors.

But, please, please please keep doing it! I have thoroughly enjoyed every one of your stories that I have read and hope you have many more to share with your readers. Thanks.

The second time was better than the first.

Great story! Lovin' your work!!

I've read about a dozen stories on your page but this one is easily my favorite so far. Rebecca is so endearing it hurts and the rest of the story was fairy tale like without going overboard. Absolutely loved it

This is ten stars for sure. Such a beautiful story to read on this rainy day. You really made my day.

This story was a good read, and had very few typos, very few grammar errors.

Live long and prosper.

I haven't l laughed so hard in a long time. I think I married her sister...

That was great

Yours stories are my favorites in Romance section. I have read 3 of yours stories, and you are my favorite author now.

Great story with happy end. Lovely story, well written and expressed.

I liked very munch, really.

Keep yours stories in the same way ever!

Congratulations!

5* for you!

I just want you to write a book and then make a movie and then a show, and don't let the damn thing die until i do. I love your stories. They're so relatable in the best ways possible. You have got talent beyond most writers. Thank you so much for giving us your time and imagination.

Your stories are so touching. The sweetness of this story is like a balm over my sore heart that was caused by the Rehab. What can I say but that I'm a sucker for happily ever afters. Beautifully written. Keep up the good work.

Wonderful story, writing!

she is a walking disaster.....god help them when the baby arrives...quite funny in parts...

The best story I read so far. The structure that the story had was perfect and also no cheese characters or scenes. Just a perfect story.⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

Hi

I was really enjoying this story, then it just ended! I'm glad I looked online at the main site though.

I read Literotica on the Android app and the last two pages are missing in that version.

If that had been the ending (just after the attack) I'd wonder if I wanted to read anymore of your stories. Technical glitch i know but worth seeing if they can fix it.

I don't know who you are or what you do... but fuck, you're A FUCKING MAGICIAN

Keep it going... it makes literotica feel like it's worth more than just the 'erotica'

Just like the original Poseidon Adventure. You are truly a gifted writer. Your characters come to life, and the reader starts to identify with and root for the main characters.

thank you for this story.

That story was one of the best . Rarely does it happen that the stories are not just about sex.Keep it up

...hereby acknowledged as belonging to the ranks of the elite erotic literary authors by this reader. Having read Cantrell, Zalazec, Argon, Colt45, Sylander, Aroslav, Lubrican, Joe J, Sea-Life, qhml1 and others of such renown, your work is recognized along side those pursuing - and attaining - the highest standards of erotic literature. Bravo and congratulations.

Thank you for sharing your talent with us.

Brian

Wow

Another great story

What a great story!!!!!!! AND !!! A happy ending.

Thank you so much. I like feeling good at the end.

Run for your life you idiot, she is walking disaster. :D I liked the story just like others. 5⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

I know it was sort of needed for the plot, and he was a gangster, but the FIRST warning Toni (odd spelling for a man!) gives to Damon is to nearly beat him to death?

Wouldn't a verbal warning or some roughing up be more appropriate?

Moreover I want to add that what dreamcloud and the others Brian mentioned is Erotic literaturebut primarily it is LITERATURE.

I have said it before - I came for the erotica but I staid for the LIT.

Thank you DREAMCLOUD.

SECOND read within 2 months. Loved it again. Not sure that is healthy. Thanks :-)

AND I DO MEAN, DAMN GOOD. EXCELLANT !!!

What are you doing, writing movie scripts for free? Too bad Cary Grant isn't still around to play the male lead!

I came into this story comment place because I couldn't on "The Festival" comment page. Sorry. if that is cheating.

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Again I'm sorry that you are not posting new stories here. I happened to find this through a Yahoo search of your name, DreamCloud. Maybe you can close the hole. I wish you well in your life. I can't imagine that someone as gifted as you are would be able to not tell your wonderful stories somewhere, somehow. If you do find a way I would surely enjoy reading them.

Thank you,

Ray hswan11@hotmail.com

Soooo sorry to hear that has happened! Many...I for one...really enjoy and appreciate your talent and stories. I just re-read "The Accident" again and it shows what a remarkable talent you are. I sincerely hope you change your mind for the benefit of those of us who miss your stories!!!

Fascinating story line. What an imagination you have. And it goes together so well.

Keep up the good work.

I recently found the first story of yours which for me was the promise and it moved me. The accident was my second. Ask for some help from the community to learn how to monetise your talent. They will help you. You can find a real world publisher in the UK in a heart beat. Good luck. Matt. my email is matt@developmentenabling.com

now to find a way to move those clouds over their heads, TK U MLJ LV NV

I loved the first half of this story and the second half was okay. But the dichotomy between the halves was too much to accept. The story felt bi-polar. I still liked the happy ending. The epilogue was unnecessary.

A solid 10. Would love if the epilog was more creative. Like telling from guy's perspective and omitting preg stick scene

As if you would know just who this is…LOL sorry my bad at being funny.

I guess i should come up with a name for you to recognize me by. I'll work on it ok

This is the third story I've read and I love it! Heard you're not around anymore? Such a shame.

Read your bio.

You are my favourite author on this site and it is such a shame that you let scumbags have so much control and power over you.

If these were intended for sale than you should have done that from the start.

If your future stories were intended to be free why hold them back because of the actions of others?

The choice is entirely yours but you let the thieves win while the readers and yourself lose........shame

THIS WAS A DAMNED GOOD STORY FROM THE FIRST WORD TO THE LAST. ONE OF THE BEST READS I'VE EXPERIENCED IN A WHILE. PLEASE KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK.

DreamCloud; if you get to read this ...

I appreciate your angst through literary piracy. Please do not let yourself continue to be a victim.

For me, you were the best writer on here, one for whom I can forgive grammatical errors and spelling. You cannot buy artistic creativity. I lived by writing (PR), but couldn't match what you create in a million years.

Please let your life shine again.

An author can put on what ever coat they want when writing a story. Dare you not assume a role is the life of anyone or anything. Look at actors and actresses, just because the play a person in a script, that does not define their life

What a great entertaining story! Pure joy! All the twists and turns made it so enjoyable! Don't stop and keep writing, please! What a way to start 2018! Thank you!

I fell in love with Rebecca and I'm not Bi.

Good shit

GREAT. I come back to your stories when I get stressed and fed up with other authors. You always make me feel better. Thanks

Truly a romantic story.

Wow, this is the first story I have read of years. Your writing is very good and the story was excellent . I was hoping the story could go on and on and sad that it ended. Well dream cloud , Great job you have a new fan .

A solid 6*, buttttttt, there is a whole miss here. Damon put 2+2 together about Cathy and Damon would allow that greedy opportunist to remain close to Rebecca.

So Rebecca was married once and her house burned down, mysteriously. Does any one not think that Cathy had something to do with Rebecca's misfortunes and her building lack of confidence? Cathy lost her free gravy-train when Rebecca moved out of her control. You would think Tammi would see it too (and be at her (secret) daughters wedding).

Also I'd have thought the Don would have made good alt the 'rash' financial losses to Damon. And maybe get Rebecca a good Chef job or into her own business. Wonder who will become their babies ghod-father/mother?

I could almost see a sequel.

Thanks for posting! I just wanted to comment that the premise of Rebecca always having things go wrong is 100% believable. I used to work with a guy that was the same way. Strange things would happen to him at least a couple of times a week. One time he accidentally drilled a hole into his thumb with a hand drill. Another time he got bit by a snake working at a cutomer's house (in an area that doesn't have snakes). Another time the work truck he was driving caught on fire. "Accident prone" fails to describe this guy. It was more like "bad karma".

a well written story without the required 8 pages to describe a sex scene. i prefer to read erotica over pornography. however, this is a love story that would make a great chick flick.

even though this 70 yr old guy has watery eyes, it's because the story has a level of intimacy i have never experienced, i liked it.

What a great story.Romance and sex at its best.

A finely crafted, beautifully written story. One of the very best. Five all the way. Your consistently high scores are deserved.

Toni looked up at me. His expression was calm. "I have acted rashly," he said, then turned to Tammi. I guessed that was my apology. I wasn't going to demand more.

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I'll stay out of it, but know that she's my blood. I will not hesitate if I feel she has been wronged."

I'd have asked what he was going to do to the three goons he sent to my house who had roughed up and fondled his daughter and threatened to rape her

Thank you for making me laugh. Thank you for making me cry. Thank you for an entertaining, joyful, captivating story that held me captive until the end.

I was only surprised that Tammi and Tony weren't invited to the wedding...

Rebecca finally got her own restaurant by way of an anonymous donation of funds. Tammi always said she needed someone who would look out for her.

On the app, this story stops at page 8... Just after Damon gets his arse kicked.

For a long time I thought it was simply a fade to black story ending and left it at that... I'm glad I just read it again today on the website!

I think it still deserves the 5 stars through. B-)

One of my favorites here

A wonderfully charming story. Very well crafted.

Fantastic story most definitely in my favorites. What a way to meet and fall in love. Again OUTSTANDING STORY

cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

Need to find a publisher dude!!!!

You seriously need to do ebooks on Amazon, your stories are as good as any I buy. Marvelous.

You seriously need to do ebooks on Amazon, your stories are as good as any I buy. Marvelous.

This story reminds me of my favorite 311 song! My God, but this woman is a walking weather system, and I love her for it. Great, light-hearted story, I needed something like this after The Gift, The Promise and The Rehab had me crying!

Your writing is stellar. Publish a novel and I’ll join the queue to buy it.

Great story

Almost any fool can write a good sentence, myself excepted. Many can write a good paragraph. Very few can put life into them. Good job start to finish.

Read this for the second time, the first was when the story was new. Just as good the second time around, thanks

Had me from beginning to end. Awesome read!

There is nothing to complain about this really enjoyable romcom. 5*

I assume there will be more accidental pregnancies with the couple.

Beautiful to read... You have a gift in your mind and hands.

Of yours that I have read, the first being 'The Gift'. There are actually quite a number of good and very good authors on Lit. There are just a few who I term 'Story Tellers' and even after just two stories you are in that list. It didn't take a genius since I was able to figure it out to see where this story was going to end up. However no one could spot the Godfather stepping into the plan. I had already expected that Tammi would be whom she turned out to be but didn't see Toni and his boys showing up. You brought up a very good safety point if even accidently (ha!), the part about the broken side spring on the garage door. This is why there should always be a safety cable installed down the length of the spring in order to stop the coils from doing what they did. Other than the two of them, especially Rebecca getting hurt I only winced once during the read. A1 Sauce? You would stain a story like this with A1 Sauce? You should be ashamed. How come I never met Rebecca? The one time I was rear ended it was by a drunken old man, he was within sight of the goal post, his home and I was on the fifty yard line. DC I hope you got my email, I miss you already. Signed: BTW

And a true disaster that you have stopped writing.

I hope, at least, that you still read these comments. So that you may perhaps find at least some small measure of solace in the fact that so many love your wordcrafts.

I hope those others which brought you to cease your writing... Are ashamed, to put it as gently as possible.

I hope you read the comments. The Promise is almost ready for Hallmark. The Rehab also. Wish you well. Great stories.

Patch

I hope you write more stories soon!

Fantastic story defiantly will read this again ... Thank you for sharing

Great writing is combined with a terrific premise in an excellent manner and something like this is created

Decent story,but after what had already happened,I think the ending was a bit flat.

Thanks :-)

Loved the story

Like your other offerings, a most entertaining story.Thank you. My second time reading this and I find it just as entertaining. 5*s doesn't describe this work.

What a great story. Love the happy ending. Looking forward to reading more of your stuff.

A fantastic story. Two ships in the night that actually collided. Love that just grows and grows. This has to be one of my favorite stories. 5 stars is as high as I could give it but it is more like a 10 star story. The mixture of so many things even having a mob boss in it. It took a lot of imigation to write this story.

Thank You for a wonderful story.

mcwhorter28445@gmail.com AKA. Ron

The story is very well written and completely captivating. Please write more stories.

Just as good with a second reading, little, fun little sex, little humor what avery storie needs. Keep writing.

Again, AWESOME. You have a real gift. Thank you for sharing.

BTW, Dad should have been at the Wedding.

Fantastic. Story. Not my first time to read it and everyone needs a Carl. I oved the flower's touch and ÷the 3 ladies he worked with but most of all I know liked Rebecca and Damon they just fit together

Sorry to add 1 little correction to what was an excellent story. An easy one to give 5 stars to. But this is is an error that virtually every contributor to this site makes and since your work is virtually perfect, grammatically speaking, I thought you'd appreciate it. Prone means on your stomach. On your back is supine. The title of your story is perfect for my picky comments because in proofing it I noticed that I had made a grammatical error. We're even.

Cree Galt

I almost have to buy a Stay-Puff t-shirt now.... 5*

Nice... But i had absolutely no doubt from the first page that the aquarium was going to go the way of the dodo... None

-jaye-

It's a real shame this author isn't active anymore :'(

i loved it!! one thing that irks me, is anons that NITPICK. they forget this is an amateur site, and strictly for entertainment, IT IS NOT A CONTEST FOR THE GRAMMYS OR OSCARS OR ANOTHER POPULARITY CONTEST!!! CHILL....

I read it a second time, and it is still a 5*.

On second reading I did question how Toni would not have found out that Tammi was pregnant. You can't hide that sort of stuff. But, it is one point out of a very nice story.

I wish the author stayed in business too.

Nice, sweet story

What a great story, a lot of drama, even more love and a happily ever after. Well done 5+++stars

Excellent 5 star story. I wish the Author would come back and write more! Second of his stories I've had the honor to read. A wonderful and talented Author in deed! Thank you again DreamCloud. Sorry to hear others have Plagiarized your works.

Very entertaining yarn!!! Little bit over the top. FUN!!!!

Lovely story. Maybe a little far fetched but and a couple of little doubts about points but a really enjoyable read.

Thanks for making the rest of us less self-conscious over choices we have made that we would hate to try to justify now. I didn't push the odds nearly as far and hard as this guy. Still, I've rethought some of the decisions I made and wonder what was it that made me ignore the obvious?

5+++

Totally OTT and I LOVED it!

A truly wonderful story. And since it's in Romance, Harry in VA and other trolls won't read it. 5*