All Comments on 'The Act of Arting'

My central criticism is the uneven pacing: one moment, Dyson is shy and nervous, the next he's virtually ripping Ivy's knickers off and tonguing her clitoris, then he's waving goodbye. There was also a hint that they might end up having to pose naked for each other (which would have slipped this into the "reluctance" category), but they'd already had sex by then, so maybe you lost interest in that sub-plot. The sex itself was handled okay, it's just that you kept slipping the clutch between first gear and fifth without any real sense of a building relationship.

I really liked this story! It is well written the charachters are likeable, and the passion is erotic an oh so arousing!

Great job!