All Comments on 'The Adventures of John Law Ch. 04'

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Wang4 about 5 years ago

Strengthening the Plot

I have enjoyed this story so far but it improved significantly in this chapter. While you were developing Johh's character, the plot consisted solely of John hopping from bed to bed . While this is ok for a one or two chapter sex story, you need, in MY opinion,a developing plot and storyline for anything more. With the bodyguard angle, you started that. Hope that was your purpose. Beth, as a character, is a keeper. Thanks for sharing

Anonymousabout 5 years ago

Love this story

Please keep writing maybe another part soon

linnear over 3 years ago

Lucky Bastard

I'm really enjoying this series.

dommasterjim about 1 year ago

MMmmm.. Another great story.. Love the text idea..!! 5 Stars..!!

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I spent 23 years in the U.S. Army followed by 20 years in law enforcement. During that time I was a bodyguard for many high-profile clients. I have travelled to over 35 countries. I have had many interesting encounters with females during that time.

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