All Comments on 'The Agreement'

Much too short for this category. Each installation should be at least three times this long.

On merits, not bad for an intro but try to post 2-3 chapters at a time, ie this one and the next two.

I didn't read past the second paragraph. Any story that begins by rattling off character body dimensions and descriptors as if they were sports stats is an immediate pass. Most details don't need to be given, and for the ones that do, reveal them naturally through the course of storytelling. Leaving some things to the reader's imagination instead of lazily listing them is so much more interesting and erotic.

You can do what you want to if you're willing to suffer the consequences!

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Didn’t read through the story after all the personal character data, and then - a reference to “Half-Black”. Why? We are sure there is a point?

It’s your story, but people are people are all equal.

You could easily make a reference as to her family heritage or where her parents came from and fell in love.

Not because he has always been attracted to Black or Half-Black!!!!!

That implies any woman who has loving and attractive traits, characteristics, intelligence and beauty; is off-limits - unless she is???????

Agatha is based on a few different women, but mostly my wife who is half black half Irish.