All Comments on 'The Apprentice Ch. 04'

can't wait to read more of magnus's adventures

As nicely done as I remember. I look forward to the ongoing reposts, and hopefully some new chapters!

I am glad you are all enjoying this. "Some" new content has already been written, but I've barely started the last chapter of The Young Mage (not the last chapter of Magnus' story) It is hard to predict how long it will take.

This has been an incredible tale, and I am thankful it will continue. I wish I could give it 6 stars.

Love it.⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Rating the whole story together, I'd say a 6/10. Pretty good, but it's very long and the sex scenes really lack the ability to arouse. Little bit of broken English at times, comes across as quite heavy. But you've got great imagination and you can tell you've got a passion for writing. I'd consider approaching an editor as you can shave at least 30k words off this and it would be so much better.

Love this story. Keep it up. I can't wait for the next part.

I loved the story. It ended more like I expected, though not as, it seems, others hoped. Please don't stop here. Yes, I saw you are continuing.

It seems odd to have such disparity in comments. Bipolar yes but not diverse. Yes it has some unusual language spots, butt, misspelled deliberately, none of us are perfect. I look forward to more.

Thank you all for the insight!

I wouldn't take anything away. This was an enjoyable read.

Another path to make him well rounded, can't wait for the next chapter

This was a very enjoyable story. I hope you will send the continuation soon. Thanks.

Only one issue with this story, parts 5,6,7,8,9,10 and the rest aren't up to read yet, really enjoying the series, can't wait till the netlxt read

I've read earlier that there was going to be more. I'm saddened in how this ended. Up until this, it has been one of the most enjoyable series I've read. I'm greatly looking forward to the rest.

The story continues but in a new series. I decided to split the story that I plan to tell into several series, to avoid having chapter 30-something and some other reasons too.

How have you got so many votes when the page-view total is showing as only 1,700? Your ratio of page views to completed readings to votes cast, for a seven-page story, is majorly skewed. Are you giving yourself 5s?

Good storylines. Congrats.

I read this story when it first came out and I adored it! With pacing and romance, you've written characters that I can't help but root for. I hope Magnus and Fiona get their happy ending, and I know no matter what, that you'll deliver some fantastic action and "action" along the way!

P.S. your writting reminded me in emotional tone to a line from my favorite poem, "The tuft of flowers" by Robert Frost: "Men work together, I said from the heart, wherever they work together or apart". What could better describe Magnus and Fiona?

Cheers!

-R

Thank you for such inspiring words! I didn't read that poem, but I definitely will now :)

Super story. A slightly abrupt departure for Magnus after no previous build up to him leaving (perhaps a ruse to trick the dastardly illusionist?). I can’t wait for more.

Great story hope there's more of this to read eventually.

Hmm, I half expected him to propose to her after their contract was up. Then again as much feminine wiles as he has had lately?

Interesting to see if the author allows him to visit his family after promising them he would visit.

Still missing a finish with the illusionist mage. Needed that to properly wrap things up.

I love your style your otherworld , Your characters . The sex . Fantastic Part 1 . I am sure the next Part will be everything this was and more . Well done and thank you .