All Comments on 'The Arrangement Ch. 04'

This is going along so well. They will both realize they are perfect for each other!

I'm sorry, but parts of this chapter are just missing that 'zing', and it fails to grab my attention properly. The stuff with Clay was getting good, but it just bombed out after that. Sorry.

Hot, and yet sad at the same time.

wow nice chapter the end was heart wrenching. poor Dan getting so close but yet so far. what happened to clay he just disappeared. i'm excited to see what happens next

Don't give up on Tara_Neale or think that you know her because one chapter does not go the way you want. So she did not further the issue with Clay! If you know a good writer when you see one, just trust her. Life is messy and painful and this author does not sugar coat it.

Will Clay get what he deserves?

Did Samuel mean he would be delirious if Simone calls him Jack, Bob or Harry or anyone of her previous lovers when she is with him?......sounds unlikely so did the entire conversation between the two......on another point....God save us from do-good meddlers.......manipulating someone into a decision that you "know" is right reeks of megalomania. As the old saying goes "All roads to hell are paved with good intentions"......trust me I know.....got the scars to prove it

The dance is a beautiful gift of love from a woman to the man she loves. As a tradition it does not take into consideration the bride's personality, her sexual experience as a whole or with her new husband. A lot of women would freeze up so badly the wedding night just got shot. When you add in the medieval "bedding" ceremony I'm not surprised if ended badly only surprised if happened at all .

This was going very well and then stumbled hard in this part. Superstitious idiots and their dumb traditions that dictate/force people to do things they don't want to are horrid.

Honestly, Simone sucks out any semblance of life this story could have for me.

I know you're trying to go for the slightly nosey caring mother hen type, but she's comes off as a narcissist with sociopathic tendencies. She manipulates and goades everyone around her Into doing whatever she thinks is best for herself.

She lied and manipulated a woman to fly across the ocean, to marry a man who didnt know she existed, constantly ignores boundaries that people have set and justifies it with "superstitions and stars"

It's hard to focus on the actual depth you're trying to show of these two characters, when you have this toxic ass person constantly there.

It's exhausting.

This installment possesses a critical flaw: focusing both main characters on their flaws and weaknesses instead of what they have in common; the premise stated Daniel would marry her for the stability for the kids and then learn to love her. Now it posits he wants to ditch Jill? Once the story takes an obvious direction, it needs to continue on that path and not retcon its own history. Minus 1 star for the retcon/unnecessary suffering dumped on both characters for no cathartic nor meaningful reason. 4