All Comments on 'The Awakening of Ms. Keys Ch. 01'

This is a good start to what looks like to be a great story!!!

You tend to overwrite a bit. Apart from that, not bad. Keep going.

NOT "overwritten"... a perfect buildup - the more tension the more satisfying the, er, release is. Can't wait for the next installment. Soon, please?

Great start and breaking off the story at the moment where you have all of our interest. Now, please do not keep us waiting too long for the next installment! Reminds me of a few others in the "Mom seduced by teen age son's friends" genre. Keep your creative juices flowing.

Long in the tooth, but interesting nonetheless.

Story is not finished. How are we supposed to grade a story that we don't know what is going on in it. There is no sexual erotism there, we don't even know if he got a hard on....or her pussy got wet....

I think this is a great start, very well written, captivating to say the least and looking forward to a continuing saga.

Thanks,

Rick

Really. You can't. It isn't fair. You /have/ to tell us what happens next!

a bit different from othere tales. not obligatory needing a second chapter..

I hope Aaron is a horse-hung stud that will show her a good time!

Nice build up to the story, but I admit I would have preferred to have some action in it. But the cliffhanger was effective in that I'll read over the next part you release

Well, done! Your story is like great foreplay!

I agree with all of the others -- more of this good stuff.

Yes, I'd sure like more.

The writing is nice; why was it not moved on to more of a completion...? is it to be part of a series ? if so, that should be stated