All Comments on 'The Babysitter and the Widower'

10 stars! Please write another chapter. The kids need a mommy, Paul needs a wife, and after college, Lizzie needs the husband that she loves, to take care of her and her three children; two adopted, and the new baby... Don't try to hurt her adopted kids, or mama bear will appear! Also, her oldest daughter needs her new mom to guide her into womanhood... Wonderful story, please continue

If this is really your first story, you are a natural! My only suggestion would be to add "Part 1" or some indicator that you are going to continue the story.

I love the dialog and the characters. Paul and Lizzie both seem like sweet people who care for each other. I will be looking for Part 2! Bravo!

Ken

Really cute story but why did you have to leave us hanging! Haha

1. Some what repetitive

2. Outstanding last line, and I didn't see it coming.

Thanks for the comments! You won't be hanging for too long, Priscilla_June! :)

I have two more chapters already completed, but I'm going back and editing them a little before I publish them. I think you will be surprised (in a good way) with the direction they go! Thank you! --- Kayla

The question is was it her sister or her mother asking the last question.

75% sister

24% mom

1% dad

I vote for the sister.

There will be at least two more parts to this story. Thanks to everyone for the comments!

Loved it! 5 stars. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Love it, needs another chapter or four!!

It's a cute story and it piques my interest in how she at 21 can enjoy a man of 40. Any couple willing to work on their relationship can make things work, and you tied Lizzie and Paul together through Heather. It seems a bit too convenient in a small part, but it's the most plausible link, given the story reveals Heather confided in Lizzy and asked her to look after Paul because she knew she was dying and didn't want him to be alone. It's an incredibly sweet thing, and it explains how Lizzie knew all that. I'd also say this first part should have gone 3 Lit pages to permit more exposition--and mainly to let Paul and Lizzie talk more so we discover how Lizzie wanted to commit to this--because the story lacked that part. Because of that, I say 4 and will read the other chapters as they surface.

Just my kind of story. Sweet, compassionate, sexy younger woman reaches out to badly wounded widower. I can hardly wait for more. 5 stars.

Great story. Waiting for part two.

Can't wsit for the next instalmemt

A great start and cliffhanger. Don't leave us hanging for too much longer.

I feat we msy never get part 2.

All Lizzie had to say is, "I'm helping my neighbor, the man I love, put our first baby in his future wife,"

Great story, particularly for a first submission. Eagerly looking forward to subsequent chapters.

Great story when is second part of story going to be posted!

Another writer that has started a story with promises of more to come and not bothered to write anymore

I'm trying to get the second part published... it was sent back to me because they though that I used AI to write it. I have resubmitted it. Stay tuned!

What's happening?

Lizzie is trying to give her step-kids a new sibling, with her older future husband ready to put love pee in her...