by pointless
I enjoyed this story VERY much... it addresses the sensual as well as the sexual, and takes its time getting where it needs to go. Well done. I suspect that you may be considering adding further chapters to this story, such as a future installment that gets Andrea's mother involved in the fun... an idea this reader thinks is just peachy. However you choose to continue, please write more about these two charming ladies--this tale has potential!
I liked how you took your time getting them into the situation. You left some nice openings for future chapters, and I hope to see more by you soon.
What a story,,,Such wonderful writeing,,,Makes you feel as you want too stand and applaude,,,IN the style of Mark Twaine,Jules Verne ETC...
Pointless has written 6 or 7 stories and every one of them has been everything I look for in erotic fiction. This one was no exception.
Pointless, this is a wonderful "first time" story, hot hot hot, and beautifully written. This is only the second story I have commented on, the first being Milene's party girls.
You set the stage so wonderfully for the final scene. The "seductess-interuptus" when they drank Irish Creme was hot hot hot also, and the "interuptus" part was a delicious twist (not a surprise, since you telegraphed it earlier), and great fun. I am too picky I know, but the only reason I rate this a four instead of five is because I personally like a little more detail in the actual sex act, and to draw it out a bit longer, but this may not be fair to you because different people probably have different tastes in that regard. Being new at this, I will try to apply some categories:
Credible/plausible - 5 star
Build up - 5 star
Emotional/psychological tension ("so wrong but feels so right") - 5 star
Kissing - 5-star
Stripping - 5 star
"All the dirty details" of the sex act - 4 star
Thanks for a really nice, well written, and HOT story.
Sincere Regards,
Roxanne Appleby
If my first time is anything like this...I'll never think of a man again. This was wonderful...thankyou!
I did find myself wishing the Seduction didn't involve booze and drugs--not because I've got an issue with them--I don't--but because only 1 partner was conscious about what she was doing, & that element of non-consent left a sort of sour aftertaste, for me. Otherwise it was very likable and felt real.
I've always had a lesbian/incest fantasy about mom joining me in a three-way. I thought this might happen.Dang! Maybe in the future episodes. Keep writing. It's hot hot hot.
wow. an amazingly written story. i couldnt help myself, during those sex scenes i fingered myself, and had an explosive orgasm. thank you!