All Comments on 'The Beach'

This is WAY too contrived, and the sex is too rushed. Heck, they are on a beach alone, with "no one here for miles" and all the time in the world. What's the big rush? Draw it out. Tantalize the reader a bit. Give the characters more than one dimension. These gals just seem like sex-starved airheads.

Really, though, after reading both your stories here, I see good potential. Read some of the other stories on Literotica and keep on writing.

God bless.

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