All Comments on 'The Beast'

This was a really enjoyable read and you didnt need the sex but that was an added bonus. A few things need developing but it read well. I know it might not be something you want to develop but more volumes to this one would be good. Note I said volumes not chapters it's an interesting world you have developed. Dont normally comment on literotica stories but you have a definite talent

5 stars for a truly great story

I read this expecting a short story about an golem-orc, what I ended up with was a story I enjoyed thoroughly and was disappointed that there wasn't more (even after 16 pages!)

I wasn't even masturbating to this by the end, it was just straight up enjoyment of him and his four wives.

Some of the grammar could use improving but I enjoyed this story from top to bottom. It flowed well and was interesting enough to keep me reading.

Keep on writing!

I give you 5 🌟. This was a very good read. I enjoyed every minute of it and look forward to more.

Enjoyed immensely, forwarding forwarding to the wife.

I almost never comment, but this was such a well written story. Great job. Sexy and nuanced, I really enjoyed it.

FANTASTIC...I apologise for the "shouting" but this story was fantastic.

5*5*5* = 15*

Outstandingly done!

I love long, complete stories. Well, at least the ones that are so well thought out and entertaining as this one. That is why I've been so happy with BurntRedstone's "Jack" series of ~20 page long stories. Each part is complete, and they are the perfect length to develop all the characters and the plot. This reminds me of those stories a lot, even though the subject matter is so different.

Great job! 5*

Dont care if its greedy to ask for more after such a great epic story. We.Need. More!!!

Great job.

Please keep writing.

I Just wanted to add to the accolades. Loved this story.

Keep up the great work.

And THANKS for the time well wasted.

Please tell us that you will continue this wonderful story.

Great story, this was the first of your stories for me and I am so glad I found it. I loved the story and it made me really use my imagination to picture the characters, a truly wonderful tale.

I stumbled across this tale and was wonderfully surprised. This is a most excellent story! Lovable characters and engaging plot sprinkled with just the right amount of sexy. Keep up the good work and thank you for sharing! I'm looking forward to reading the rest of your stories.

The story was so good I was sorry it wasn't longer

A henpecked troll hybrid. Go figure! I wonder if he grew from killing the third troll as well? This saga HAS to continue

Five stars!

Well done

First time I felt a need to comment. This was a fantastic story. Great length, great character development, just a fun read. Would love to read mor about them. Thank you!

Love the longer stories! Short little snippets are just a waste of time. it takes a while to get involved in a tale.

This is a really good one. I would by it if theiyr’re was a whole book

Please do more of this!

Oh my god, where has this story been all my life!!!

I check for this author's stories religiously, and somehow missed this one. It's like getting a second Christmas!

Yes, please more stories!!!

I love this story. Hope you do more in the future.

Read here. I checked your profile for an update and saw you published on amazon. Bought a copy and left you a review. Hope it helps!

I’m not sure how I’ve missed this, but wow what a fun read. Love the characters and twists the plot took on this great fantasy journey.

That was great. The wives just kept coming!

Kinda lame not having the elves wives in the final battle

that I've read. It will not be the last. Well done. Loved Frelser's attitude and don't give a damn style. Thank you for your hard work.

Woodmanone

Nicely done. That was quite fun to read.

While there are some mistakes grammatically, the overall Story was superb. I couldn't put it down. My biggest complaint is that it doesn't continue on for another 20 chapters. I do hope that you continue this story.

Was amazing and couldn't put it down. Could we have more pleaseeeeee

Excellent story.

Really loved the combination of well written fantasy and hot sex. Hot sex is always missing from the typical fantasy book. Loved using the text as the start for imagination.

Please keep writing more!!!!

This was a hard one to take a break from, despite its length. All your characters were simple but lovable, which is pretty hard to pull off well. This was just a great read that had me feeling good when it was done. If I had to criticize anything, it would probably just be the very last bit of pacing. Having the former mayor die off-page was a bit of a bummer, considering how much we got to know him before the end. Very minor nitpick though, especially considering the length of this tale. Great work

A truly wonderfully written story! Thank you so much for sharing this with us!

Awesome story!

Wow so interesting,the story was all over the place,I that in good way.thanks really appreciate your work 5 🌟

I don't understand why so many writers abuse hanging participles so much in their writing. Not trying to flame but maybe you can explain.

Ditto “Great characters, great humor, great world building and great action!”

A fun action packed story full of magic, battle, sex, character building (wink wink), sex, interesting background stories, More fighting, and did I mention

S E X!?! A fun read. THANK you so much for sharing your story with us!!

- pal

Very enjoyable and a worthy competition winner.

Thank you for sharing, and I look forwards to reading some of your other pieces.

If you are not selling you work somewhere it wold be a same.

Like, wow. You are well versed in the art of producing a page turning tale.

I loved this story and kept reading till the end. Missing the next button for more exquisite adventures of The astounding Frelser tribe. I loved those lively girls and the way they raised Frelser to become an even more awesome guy, than he already was. Macho men went out of style wayyyy back in the Neolithic times. We need more blokes like Frelser, Grah or Darry.

Please indulge us with more of same.

Love and peace, NovaM 🧚🏼‍♂️🧙🏽‍♂️

"French toast", where the hell did that come from? Had me cracking up when I read that. I liked the story line but there are some things that just don't set with the times. Until lately, there weren't any signed documents for leases or such. A man's word was his bond and pity the one that broke his word. Another thing that brought me short was that everyone was enjoying having a bath after the first battle with the goblin army. Kind of short sighted on their part not to double the guard, knowing there would probably be another attack.

Okay, it's not my story and I'm not a story writer, so I'll just enjoy what's written and look forward to the next chapter.

One of the best stories of the genre I have read. Thank you.

A little fast paced, I thought the fast pace was only for the prologue, to explain the background and not uneccessarily drag the opening you know.

But it was only going faster from there lol.

Some things also doesn't make any sense, words like "peeping tom". He shouldn't now that, the word peeping tom and its meaning was from the history of Earth. Not whatever world that was.

And also the romance, I even doubt I could call it that, but it was so easy. I understand the first one, Eila. But the rest was.. meh.

Some important things that I thought neeed explanation was just glossed over and again, bruh the fast pace really kinda ruined the overall tone of the story for me.

But I still enjoyed reading it.

3/5 , nearing 4, just because it was my guilty pleasure, reading story with OP MC and harem.

I couldn't finish the first page. The overuse of "..." was off-putting. A lot of great comments though. Maybe I'll read it eventually.

Lost me at "batted". Couldn't stop giggling with the image of elven "baseball" in my mind.

I looooovvvvvveeeed it!! Good characters and storyline. my only critique is it ended, would be incredibles if you cut the epilogue and write another chapter. Thank you for writing this masterpiece!

Great story!! I love a fantasy story with magic etc. Only wish the wives were pregnant. Keep up the good work.

I like your stories alot , but they just end abruptly.

You leave unanswered questions and loose ends.

Please try to take them to the end...

You have a great imagination, keep up the good work.

My first time re-reading a story, hyping myself up for book 4, couldnt be more excited!

Now, this is some gourmet shit. A few small slips, but good engagement and story. Gonna give all four parts a read

Brilliant!!!! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

My 1st read of your work. I WILL be reading more. 5 stars for an excellent tale. DMW aka

Absolutely fabulous! <3

Superbly entertaining, only wish it was longer. A rocking 5⭐️’s

I'm still in the process of reading, but man this is such a good quote (page 3):

"'What are you, beast or man?' Asked the elder.

'Better question, is what am I not?' I replied cryptically."

It's by far the best response to such a question I've ever heard, in other literotica pieces, (more conventional) novels, or TV/movies.

Loved it!!!