All Comments on 'The Beginning Ch. 08-11'
by FantasyStoryLover
- 6 Comments
FantasyStoryLoverabout 4 years agoAuthorThe next chapter will be up in the Sci-Fi category.
Anonymousalmost 4 years agoThis is very well written for my tastes and I applaud your writing skills. Can't wait to read the rest.
Anonymousover 3 years agoReally would have liked him to say, "No thanks. I'm not interested in your war, or in being trained in combat. Take me home. I need to sort out my parent's affairs and go back to school." Everyone just assumed he would agree without any argument. "Show him to his abode, tomorrow he starts training." Bah.
Would have been cool to have them all begging him to stay, reminding him how powerful he was, etc...
Willmottover 2 years agoMC is too passive. No agency. His life ended and he accepts everything without question.
Anonymousalmost 2 years agoSorry, begging a really minor point… The boys went camping in the middle of summer, and encountered mosquitoes and such, all good. But… a hibernating bear, in the middle of summer…?
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