All Comments on 'The Bird Returns Ch. 01'

I could not even read past the 2nd page, I know this is a story of fiction, but no one has the right to use sex as a way to change anther person's point of view no matter what they are

You were right about this being long and complex. But enjoyable? Not so much.

The idea is fairly good (although perhaps it should be in MindControl or NonConsent?). But it seems very rushed. What should be hot scenes are quickly sketched with little apparent interest. Eh.