All Comments on 'The Birthday Present'

A very good story and I feel that there could be many more chapters as they pull in Lauren to make it a foursome in time. There is a lot more that I could ask for but this as a stand alone is a five star.

I await your next post thank you for this one

Way too much waffle.

Present tense stories seldom work (especially when you forget which tense you are using).

Too many mistakes. And, as has been said, too much waffle.

more please but fix the spelling and word usage issues.