All Comments on 'The Bodyguard'

This was a wonderful story. The chemistry was fantastic, the shifting viewpoint was well done and I haven’t read a better story with similar themes. 5 stars and look forward to your other work.

Really liked this love story ! 5 stars

What a genesis tale! This has the makings of a superb series. 5 stars and a fave!

Will be reading more of your work as well

Good story!

5

Amazing story. Character development, intriguing storyline, slow burn in the pacing were all done perfectly. You are truly gifted. They need more than a five star for a story like this.

I agree with some of the other comments. This was an amazing story. The author managed to get through 9 pages without anything actually happening. I found that I could skip whole paragraphs and large chunks without missing a thing. What a talent! If i wanted to be positive (which would be a stretch) I could compare this story to Ravel's "Bolero" which is about 10 minutes long and repeats one or two musical phrases over and over and over again and ends in a dramatic climax. Ravel builds the suspense as he goes along whereas this just cruises along at a dull level for page after page. Ravel gets a 5*; this gets a overly generous 3*

Disappointed. Not much delivered for such a long story. 2.5

This was such a great story with a lot of excellent tension and buildup as it went along. I was glad there was no armed assault on the initial compound or the second safehouse, and equally glad that Logan didn't have to go Rambo on such invaders. That it was a regular protection job where they're providing protection but there's no gunplay was a plus. What surprised me is that I didn't enjoy the final sex scene when Logan started calling her names that get used way too often in stories on Literotica but which would probably get the loser saying them a slap in real life. That didn't sound like the character we'd come to know over 9 pages and it was a turnoff that could have easily been avoided with a better choice of words. That lost a star and a favorite.

Oh hell no - You don't get away without the ending. WTH? Bring on Chapter 2 so I can rate this what it should be. 4*

I enjoyed the story - the pacing, the tension, the switching between characters, and the character development. The only thing that threw me and threw me hard was whenever they'd get to the physical stuff and suddenly it'd take a turn I don't think rings true to the characters - the degrading talk during sex. She mentions more than once about giving him all her holes. Why? That's not what their relationship is about or what ignites their passion. They don't talk about anal sex or have anal sex (thank you), so why does she keep reducing herself to a bunch of holes for him to use? And him calling her derogatory names out of the blue. Why? Just because he's the boss of his security crew doesn't mean he can't enjoy sex without calling his partner a cumslut. Those things seemed wholly out of character for both and turned me off whenever it was getting hot. It's disappointing reading such out of place and tired cliches of things said in the heat of the moment that's represented in porn far more often than in real life in an otherwise original and enjoyable story.

You have no worries, it is a great story.👍

The writing was excellent…as was the character development. The storyline, however, wasn’t very exciting. I might have been as bored as Rebecca seemed to be. And I’m probably too old, but I don’t think of romance and cum slut in the same thought-bubble. I shudder to think what my wife of almost 50 years would have done, had I told her that she was my cum slut. I’m betting she would have simply walked away.

Thank you for the feedback so far, much of it has been helpful.

It seems that the most upsetting point for readers has (ironically) been the sex scenes. I can understand where personal preferences dictate, and I respect that.

With regards to the boringness of the storyline, I did try to warn that it was slow; that it was about the nuances of how attraction may feel for that person. I'll try to warn better next time.

Thanks again for reading and voting, and a big "Hello" to my newest followers!

A wonderful story, wonderfully written. Engaging from the start, good character building, drew me in nicely. Loved it.

Great story, loved it. I’m a 68 year old happily married man and l love a good romance, this was a better than good romance. And, unlike the movie, The Bodyguard, this one had a far happier ending.

Congrats on this great tale, into favourites it goes, it scores an easy 5/5

I loved the story, and followed it with great interest. I think their love was almost "promised," even though it seemed as if they were apart, never likely to be involved with each other, and even hostile at times. But love comes through, I guess, and Logan and Bex make a great loving couple. I kept looking for a solid physical sexy description of Logan -- I sense that his cock is an impressive instrument that she truly enjoys -- whether she's fingering it, sucking it, or taking in inside her. But I imagined Logan with a sexy hairy chest, given he is 39 and a mature, well-developed, well-muscled masculine guy. I am sure they can talk to her father and explain their growing love for each other. She is well protected by Logan, and they can be great lovers together, eve if they marry. He is one sexy guy, and I for one would love to find my own Logan some day!

The best storyyyy i love itt

Great writing combined with an utterly boring storyline. Strange mix. I would have expected something extremely dangerous happening, given the bodyguards and threat setting. Perhaps the asshole father having caused some real danger for his daughter or even willingly putting her in danger to his personal advantage, and Logan being the one to put him in place, putting his life and career on the line. All these possibilities were suggested, by seeming to lurk, but nothing and nothing both actually happened. 4*

This needs a continued sequel :)

Make a sequel pls! And you better make her bucket list entry of Logan cumming himself happen!

The story is an excellently crafted slow burn romance. As the story moves along, the reader is forced to fall in love with characters that grow and mature before our eyes. I understand the comments calling for a sequel, but I could understand if the author saw the story as complete. Very well worth the read.

The Hoary Cleric

Oh, perfection! I'm a writer and editor so I know what I'm saying: This is one of the very few best stories I've ever read online! You deserve more followers. Will be waiting for more stories written by you.