All Comments on 'The Boss's Daughter Ch. 03'

what more can I say

Surely they could have had sex more often before the end, LOL.

Seriously.

Between the frequent misuse (or non-use) of quotation marks, your seemingly-random use of the semicolon (;), using the WRONG word (such as "dinning room" instead of "dining room", "shuttered" instead of "shuddered") and much, MUCH more, there were literally DOZENS of errors, each of them breaking me out of the story.

Do yourself - AND your readers - a favor, by finding - and USING - an editor!

-Rei