All Comments on 'The Breeding Program Ch. 01'

Liked story line, but need editor to monitor word selection, i.e. breed not breeded. :-)

This reads like a comic strip rather than an actual story. I notice that you have posted several other tales. I didn't bother to read any as this item is such a disaster that I won't waste my time with such childish drivel. You need an editor. That is an understatement. You need a teacher, and then perhaps you will only need an editor.

The idea is fine. The story could be more than silly fire hose eruptions and K-sized breasts. Start again. Write a story for adults. You may be able to do it, but this dreck is beyond contempt.

Sorry, total crap, as soon as I saw 36h, 38k, and at least five or six times his cum flooded his mother's pussy or arse, I realised I that I was reading something written by a twelve year old, or someone with a brain that age. NO STARS.

I think you should be deleting the "anonymous" cowards. If you want to make a comment you should be required to sign in, it's only fair. This has a lot of good possibilities, as far as grammar goes that's just a farce too be worried about that on a porn site.If your MB, that's the last thing on your mind is grammar. Keep it up, love to see mom get pregnant.

Complete ignorance of human physiology and insemination technique

for a yuk story.

complete shit show of of and then the fucked no build up no real action

The writing was terrible. Just jumping straight into screwing without any build up was boring as hell and actually felt childish. 1/5

cdnbimale50 you are complete idiot. This rambling by the writer is a complete disaster and shows the writer is completely ignorant about anything sexually and human biology. Defending this crap is just stupid.