All Comments on 'The Brush Tiger of Derven Ch. 01-05'

Very interesting. That mind of yours:) I like it:)

It's a really intriguing story. Thank you.

Reading this chapter, I'm reminded of a phrase that I myself am trying to work on with my own writing. Show, not tell. It's much better for you to show readers what the character thinks and wants, than to tell them. Intriguing story, but were you to adopt the show not tell approach I suspect it would be even better.