All Comments on 'The Burn'

You are a very gifted writer.

Great story!

Very well written.

Thoroughly enjoyed the story, look forward to more from you.

WOW! What a Story!!!! Please keep writing!

Drugs ruined it for me... Sorry.

Enjoyed it all, it brought me back to being one, and being powder coated the PLAYA!

I would love to see this as a movie. Really well written!

GREAT STORY!!!! I WOULD HOPE THAT YOU WILL CONTINUE A BIT MORE INTO THIS LOVE STORY , SAY PERHAPS FOR ONE MORE CHAPTER AFTER THEIR ARRIVAL HOME. YOU MOST ASSUREDLY HAVE A TALENT FOR WRITING THESE STORIES SO I MUST BID YOU GOOD LUCK WITH YOUR FUTURE WRITINGS AS I WILL LOOK FORWARD TO READING THEM. THANK YOU

the lack of actual dialogues between mom and son made this so hard to read.. And all the party stuff was just boring and weird... same goes for moms friends.. it started so well but went boring and too unrealistic..

Great story. I would love to hear how things go in the real world.

Really good read. Enjoyed all of it.

Cheers

Great story 5⭐️,,, that they finally found each other and how they truly felt.

Awesome story loved all of it and I was glad when mom and son finally found each other and there love was found I wish you would continue with one more chapter of this to see how there love could continue when they reached home!!! Gave it 5 stars!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I love the originality of this story, your vivid descriptions, and the beautiful, slow-burn romance. I hope to see many, many more mom/son stories from you. And it might be nice in future stories to include more dialogue. This is a fantastic story nonetheless!

This was one of the best reads I have found but wish you would have continued and see how their love continued in their real world at home??? Gave it 5stars

This was a real nice story although it took a while for the incest to begin you should continue and see how they do when returning home. Maybe mom bares him a child and they continue together. Gave it a 5.

Outstanding! Thoroughly enjoyed the entire story 👍

Excellent story. Beautiful first story! 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVAS STARS!

AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It took a while for the sex but you could feel the love they had for each other. You need to write more of this story and see how their love continued after they arrived home, maybe mother become pregnant and they lived their lives together!!!!!!!!! 5 STARS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Simply amazing! Especially for your first submission. I hope you write more.

Truly loved this. You captured such moments of beauty. Will be reading more of your own work and please let us know if you ever sell any books.

Nice story with an apt description of the Burning Man festival. For those interested, a really GREAT companion piece about Burning Man is 'Playa Dust in the Bedouin'. A wonderful bit of writing . . . .

I absolutely loved this story! Perfect mixture of anticipation, sensuality, tenderness and holy fuck did you deliver the goods!

I really like your story. I gave it 5 stars and started following you. The only advice I have is to study the writing maxim to “Don’t tell, show!” We writers must strive to make our writing as engaging as possible and showing vs telling paves the way. For instance, instead of telling us about a conversation, engage us in the conversation by using dialogue. Let us get to know your wonderful characters by what they say and feel in relationship with each other and the events they encounter. You have a great talent so keep writing and ‘show’ us new stories in the future.