by buxtonboy
That was a well done story with good spacing and good timing. Well done and it was a pleasure to read.
Enjoyable story understand the reason for four stars not five is it explained her reason for the bus ride but not his motivation thoroughly. The story felt incomplete.
I don't often read the romance category, but I am glad I read this one.
Enjoyed your tale. Wonder at your reasoning for using the first person view and then changing that view. Seems an unnecessary complication for the reader that lends nothing to the story. Would recommend third person if the thoughts and feelings of both characters are wanted.