All Comments on 'The Busboy'

Loved the story! I hope it doesn't make me vulnerable to a mob hit. It's weird, I peruse this site for erotic stories yet I find ones like these the higher rated in my mind. No, there is little to no erotic content but it is well worth reading!

Well done!!!!

Good story!

Amazing work! I literally couldn’t stop reading the story, bringing my productivity to zero today. LOL! 5*

Enjoyed. This is good work!

It wa sa very stupid and pathetic attempt to pull at heart strings! Better put it in Romance as here it just does not fit! It looks sad! ….and there were no loving wives here….

Not a single story in which his protagonist is a man with a backbone. 1 star.

Very good tale. Well written.

5 stars

great story thnks 5 stars

You really did cook this story with gas 💯

Fun story, well paced. He was a good guy, who was lucky to escape too many mob entanglements and gets the girl in the end. 5 Thanks.

I really enjoyed it! Good read.

"Can I at least have a hug?" she pleaded.

NO

Good story. When a story is this good I do not miss the sex scenes at

It probably was a decent story, but putting it in the wrong category created expectations you failed to deliver on, which couldn't be overcome by the average writing and story line.

I'm in the Loving Wives category...check.

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I read this story in the Loving Wives category...check.

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There is no signs of a loving wife for 6 1/2 pages...check.

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Somewhere in the fluff after the story is finished in the last half of page 7 there seems to be somewhat of a mention of a wife...check

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So exactly why would the author put this in the Loving Wives category?????????????? Enquiring mind what to know???????????

Really good, five stars.

Hits close to home; brings back long forgotten memories. Thanks.

This story is interesting and well written but should be in Romance or Novels.

I liked it. I don't understand about the complaints about Loving Wives - there are other stories in the category where the female character is a fiancee, just like in this story. Really well done, thanks!

I liked your characters. They were different!

5

That was a great story. I loved how everything came around.

5stars

What a great read. Really great.

Please keep writing!

Wow that was awesome , so deeply rich in characters and so gripping , the only thing that sucked was it came to an end , albeit a completely fulfilling one . I don’t think I’ve ever enjoyed any story on this site as much as I did this one .

That was excellent. Thanks.

Five stars from me. What an interesting story - a subtle hint of menace from all the underworld characters, unrequited love and the heartache of it, and finally finding a deserving woman. Thanks again (and I thought it was absolutely in the right category).

Pass

It was a good story, maybe great, about Romance, pretty much Non-Erotic. A story about Angela fucking around on her mediocre tennis pro with a nationally ranked golf pro, now that would be a classic Loving Wives story. Maybe someone will write that, in the right category.

A darn good yarn! Thanks for posting.

Here here for Henry Hill! I enjoyed it. Jimmy created instances of revenge for Dave. Jimmy had to know Lisa’s identity when he had Brad whacked. The open question is whether he was pushing Dave away, or toward her.

Great story, none better. Loved everything about it

great story. Loved everything about it

Nice story.

Great story! …such a wonderful read! Thank-you

Better than most in this category. Good job! Thanks

Just brilliant! Such clever, thoughtful work.

Brilliant indeed. 5*

A good story but it was missing something but I can't quite put my finger on it.

Great story - keep writing !

I got it at the end with reference to 'Casino'. Great story. Who knows what 'mob' life is like. More honorable than politics for damn sure. Look forward to your next twisted tale.

Perfect story

Don't know how I missed this last week, glad I found it. Well written interesting story. People complain about it being posted in LW, but fiance stories are fine with me. Thanks for sharing, always happy to see a CWG story.

Great story. Highly entertaining. Author's best story imho. Lisa made a mistake. It hurt like a betrayal but it was a mistake. They had mutually agreed to take time of and be non-exclusive for the summer. She was 18-19 went to a party, no birth control, got drunk and high and ended up getting into it with another kid. While she planned to resume her relationship with the MC, she felt guilt (hence he frosty nature). Back then no Plan B pill. She should have been on birth control but she had controlling parents. And was stuck in a loveless marriage with nowhere else to go due to a pregnancy that she didn't want but lost early anyways to her great suffering. With her husband beating her and treating her like crao, she went to her sister's house, hoping for any sort of improvement in her shit marriage but turns out he got into it with the wrong people and wound up dead. She made a mistake that she paid for dearly and ended up with a dead husband at 20 years of age, having to grow up in hurry. The MC was always the love of her life and she proved it after they reconnected. Sweet story. More of a suspenseful romance than a cheating loving wife or fiancee story. Angela liked him, maybe even convinced herself she lived him, seeing him as her protector but only rarely as her prince, hence hee need to improve him. She helped him in some ways but wanted more and had no street smarts, falling for the charms of a predator in Pierre. She saw future plans of modeling, Paris and money, but felt obligated to David and did care for her, just not enough to really choose him. Even assuming she did not have sex that night (which I think the author wants us to believe as the truth), her other actions suggest she is attracted to men of wealth and power. Partly she did want to spare David from Pierre, but she was naive about Pierre's motives and how she was a pretty chess piece caught between to men who detested each other. Jimmy hit the nail on the head when he showed the pictures and gave him some useful advice. It is suggested he had Brad whacked at least in part due to knowing that was Lisa's deadbeat husband. While David loved Angela and proposed to her, she wasn't committed as deep down he was not her dream, and if anything she felt was holding her back from the life she wanted (which she got with a pro tennis player). Certainly she was playing a game without understanding the consequences. I appreciated how David pulled off her rings, out the engagement on hold and didn't leap into things, though it was building his rage over time before Jimmy gave him the 411. Truthfully Angela's motivations are complex and it is believable that she did not really betray David for Pierre, assuming we buy her explanations, but she also didn't love David enough to go to bat for him and be the person Lisa would be for him. Angela wanted to run away and be with David, but marrying her would only bring woe down the line as she pursued her dreams in a world that she simply cannot understood the rules and properly navigate. Unlike some commenters below, don't see her as a true cheater but just not a committed life partner for David. He was in his own words, "a project" not "a prince" to Angela. She loved him but not unreservedly. She was attracted to Pierre because of his wealth and power, blinded to his motives and intent, thinking she could play the game, but really fooling herself. Doesn't make her a bad person (nor a loyal, loving person), just a person who got in over head, and would have been eaten alive in the modeling world. Anyways glad he and Lisa got back together even if it was by Jimmy's nefarious dealings.

Did he do anything with all that GM experience?

Loved the story. I'm nearly 70 years old and have always had a thing for the mob/organized crime genre. Probably a good thing I was not exposed to it as a young man.

Pretty damn good.

That was a story! I enjoyed the whole thing.

Outstanding story. Unique twists and turns. Thanks,

Thanks for writing this. I loved it. I wish though, that you'd have said what David got his degree in and ended up doing.

Oh I got to the end but wonder why, it was full of words , lots of words and lots of repeats, that seems on reflection was only to make it longer so much as it was a story that is different from most here, it was all fluff.

Seemed to me a lot longer and more complex than necessary. But then I never did figure out what he thought was going on with Angela, so maybe tea’s in me. Thanks for writing.

Well, s a person from my past used to say " love is a feeling between fools", or, something like that... Don't want to relive or rekindle those turmulent/tumulent years... Grammar never was a strong point? Yeah!

Still a good read, thank you!

Through all the twists and turns, this one I'll cherish, for a long time.

Thank you, for all the hours you spent on creating (or is it spinning thia yarn), high five to the right!

I grew up in Rhode Island. Clubs here were Italian restaurants and backrooms in federal hill. Saw the old man once when I was very young. I was at a friend's birthday party. Turns out his mother was his niece. I had no idea at the time of course. It was only later that I realized my buddy had a lot of uncles and who they were. They were always nice to me.

Great story that had a real feel about it. Thank you.

The backdrop for this drama never really came into focus for me. What was Pierre's puported role and purpose at the club? At some point, his intrusive presence without a defined role and function that helped get things done would have been an irritant to the owner. What was Ford's motivation to allow him to hang around all the time?

Also, must object to any rationalizations about one character: Naïveté does not explain or excuse Angela's actions with respect to Pierre. The scene in which she commands her supposed fiancé to leave her alone with another man so they can carry on with their physical intimacy,while she is wearing her engagement ring,is simply unacceptable and unforgivable. There is no way to spin that scene as something their relationship could survive.

good story without wild actions and reasonable characters.

well done

Did not like it at all but it was well told

3/5