All Comments on 'The Cabin'

Excellent! Second time reading this & it’s still surperb.

5stars again.

Bill S.

Excellent moving short story.

OMG! SO wicket ! Thanx!

*wow*

very powerful.

Utterly readable sublimely.

Also skillfully blends three distinct strands of life into one.

Thank you.

This was a really fun story. The comment that mentioned that even a primitive cabin should have a wood burning stove was correct. Fur trappers may not have all had stoves, but this is a cabin that was for rent, to not only survival experts. Also I suspect there would be some sort legal requirement for some sort of emergency beacon or flare for a licensed rentable hunting cabin. Even if there was not, a responsible owner would provide something. Still, overall it was a really good story.

AGAIN, A GREAT CREATION !

THANK YOU !

A really nice tale with an interesting twist BardnotBard

Another great story, albeit involving guardian angels

One thing is that I would have assumed any cabin would have a stove and not depend on a fireplace. Stoves were common in 18th century.

Not one of author's best because it is a total fable, unlike The rehab or the Promise or some of author's other great works.

Very well told.

[29.08.23]

Once again I have been attacked by invisible Ninjas dicing onions!

11/10!!!!!

You are so absolutely talented. I love your stories.

Loved it! I’m a sucker for stories like this.

I had thoughts of an angel mid way through, but wasn’t sure. There were enough hints so as not to make an ‘then a miracle occurred & straightens out everything’ moment which ruined everything. It just seemed as though everything made sense. A good 5 star tale.

Bill S.

Soooo, good! Even better on 2nd, 3rd, 4th, read... needs Epilogue or more!

Very beautiful & a wonderful read. It says many things which have not been said. It's a too good story

Better on the second read.

Also you have a nasty habit of making me cry when I read your stories. I hope you feel proud of yourself…⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Great story. I just wish it had a longer ending.

EXCELLENT !

THANK YOU ! !

This story never fails to bring a tear and a smile.

Just read this one for the first time. I loved how there was a lot that was unsaid in this story, but enough was given that our imaginations could fill the gap.

I was a little perturbed in the ending, I wanted to see more on the connection with Sam, but again, imagination can fill that gap.

Thank you for writing this one

Five stars for this story. I always feel happier after reading any of your stories.

Than you.

Jeff Troyer

I enjoyed the story very much. It was entertaining, erotic and surprising. Well done.

Most plans we create falling apart and life is teaching us the proper direction ....... Freezing to death, sounds not so comfy until sleep claims your body for eternity ...... May not much difference with bleeding to death ....... But sometimes angels rescue appears or just the lifetime play isn't done yet ....... Lovely written, thinking he is a hero and turning him into different shade of light

💖💖💖💖💖💖💖💖💖🍀

I loved this. While I agree with the cowardly anonymous critic about breath & breathe, which are pet peeves of my own, I thought the story was truly wonderful. I've gotten used to breath/breathe errors to the point that I'm surprised when someone actually gets them correct. Taut/taught/taunt still bugs me a lot, though. And when did the people of America forget how to spell "loser"? OI!

Absolutely fantastic!!! Thank you...

Sweet story. I really enjoyed the surprise at the end.

This is one of my favourites!!

I feel kinda bad for those who seem to be unable to lose themselves in a story, finding the need to nitpick errors.

I have never been disappointed by any of your stories.

good ending with the Angel and Samantha.

interesting... however, "author" cannot tell the difference between the verbs 'to lie' and 'to lay'; nor between the verb ''to breathe" and the noun "breath". ALL major middle school errors.

So so good, on the off chance you should ever check these comments DreamCloud, please know you’re missed, I know why you aren’t here any more, but we the readers miss your story weaving. Thank you for what’s still here. Cheers Ppfzz.

Outstanding!! And thank you for shari ng.

Another great tale from a master story weaver. Hope there are more of them to be found LP

beautiful!

Amazing! Thank you.

Nice twist at the end. I had not seen that one coming. Good job.

Another masterpiece! I’m on the 7th story in your repertoire and haven’t been disappointed yet! PHENOMENAL work!

This was an awesome story!!!

For reasons I can't explain,it made me cry as she unveiled herself as an angel!

I can't read your œuvre any longer. It hurts too much for where I am in my life today. You're such a fantastic storyteller.

Fantastic read. Thank you for taking the time to write and share it.

Really nice story. Please start writing here again, or tell us where we can read your newer stories

What a great tale of a man who was so down he wanted to end it all only to be saved by a guardian angel and his sister. The twist at the end where he came face to face with Samantha who he could see in her eyes that Julie her was her guardian angel. I would have been interesting to have an epilogue of where Bill and Samantha found love and a happily ever after and that would have been a fitting end. Well done 5++stars

Wonderful story although I almost stopped when the wood stove took 10 loads for the day. Living in Alaska and heating with wood, 1 armload in the morning and one at night is the most it took in the worst weather. His was the most inefficient stove I ever heard of.I am very glad I kept going and I thoroughly enjoyed the story.

Great Story and excellent imagination and writing!

Thanks

Good story.

Great finish.

Thanks.

A lovely story! So well written and lots of yummy parts too. Thank you!

Wow, just wow. Your descriptions and storytelling and way to make it all fit perfectly and unwrap so smoothly... wauw

When I do a jigsaw, the pieces rarely fit, even when you adjust them using scissors. This blasted author however, seems to have the knack of plotting them together seamlessly - clever bastard! 5 ill-fitting pointy things because of the scissors.

Sometimes answers found when you aren't looking for or at unlikeliest places. I found one in this story. Thanks

Really enjoyed this story and I must say it is on a par with your other fantastic ones! You have the ability of producing a piece of work that is so distinctly different from the others. It is a tragedy that consequent on your work being plagiarized, you have stopped writing for LIT. Wish you well DreamCloud, in your future enterprises. 5*s.

Excellent crafting, delicious descriptions and great timing. Just enough to bring a glow of happiness over the tension that you had built up in those four chapters.

Excellent, just excellent!

Once again a brilliant story that held enraptured till the end......personally, I think it needs a follow-up... Thank you...

My second time around for this story and it still brought tears to my eyes, I've lost my angel and there is not much hope of finding another.................

I didn't see a second chapter on the author's list of stories. Does anyone know if theres a part 2 or another story that would fit?

I would like ten minutes with the thief who stole your works on Literotica to sell them on Amazon. Just ten minutes, that would be more than enough. Per Literotica's FAQ's (see below) it states they will go after people who violate copywrite law. I'm more than curious to know if that actually happened. If so, I hope the thief suffered painfully. It's a travesty for all of us on LIT that we won't read any new stories from you. Every story you have written strikes emotional chords in all of us. We aren't just reading, we feel it too. Thank you for what you have written.

"While Literotica is not in any way required to enforce your copyright for you, you are granting us the right to do so if we become aware of anyone using your story without your explicit consent. The right to enforce your copyright that you are granting us includes the right to file DMCA complaints, file lawsuits, and any and all other necessary actions, both foreign and domestic, to prevent unauthorized people and companies from using your submissions without your permission."

Wordcraft

Very good story, really enjoyed the ending, more please

Do you know how boring it is to have to read your stories and almost know that inevitably I'm going to give you five pointy things, and ignore the minor editing glitches?

In fact I'm most probably going to be bored enough to read another one of yours

to make sure I stay awake!

I liked Bills most excellent adventure! This is the second of your stories I’ve read, and I know for sure I will be reading all the rest. You’re really good... thanks!

Really good story would love a squeal

I have read all of your stories, quite a few twice. Every story is different and complete.

Way better than anybody on this site. Thank you.

...way above the common Lit drivel. Gonna read all your stories, thank you very much.

I just thought he would end up getting some hugs from his sister and a bunch of stern lecturing. I didn't see the daughter of the Helicopter Pilot coming into the picture and I thought the Angel was his sisters.

I will give you a 5 for throwing several curveballs into the story, at least to me they were.

Being the only male in a family of 6 sisters and a mostly single mom, perhaps I am just tainted from being lectured by women most of my life especially for my numerous screw-ups. Well, I don't think they were screw-ups but the women in my life do.

Apparently, choosing jobs most of my life that got me tackled, punched, kicked, sliced, stabbed, shot and nearly blown up once was poor life choices on my part according to them. They thought I had come to my senses after leaving a short 3 years in the CIA doing Intell Gathering only to see me sign up for 8 years in the Navy as an Intell Officer in the Field. Once that was over I switched to Firearms Training and Part-Time Hobbyish P.I.

But the real Bitching, Crying, & Lecturing began at 6am on September 12, 2001 when I was standing at the door waiting for the Commander to open it at my local National Guard Armory to "Re-Enlist" in the Military. I guess they knew this was something I felt I had to do because they all started calling and coming over shortly after 12 Noon on 9-11 fearing I would do what I did the next day. They knew what going into the Guard would entail and even though my youngest sister describes me as the biggest BadAss she has ever met, they still feared for my safety as I had garnered a reputation of leaping before considering the danger of situations. My sisters are all kind of small, small being under 5'9" and 120lbs. They are nothing like me at 6'7" 265lbs. While my mothers family is smaller people, my Dad and his family were big people but I am the biggest by 2" over a cousin of mine.

None of us, including myself, were prepared for my 1st deployment to Iraq to last 23 Fucking Months. When I got back none of my sisters or my mom would leave me alone for the first 2 months. When I got the orders for my 2nd Deployment I thought they all were going to shit SUV's. My one sister, who is friends with one of our D.C. Senators went to her and demanded she make sure the Deployment would not be anywhere near that long again. Like a Senator, even a powerful one, could do anything about it lol.

Even now, being retired and only doing the Firearms Training, I am constantly lectured by the women in my life.

Got ambushed by this story even though the outcome was sort of hazily predicted.

Your writing technique is good enough for me to want to know exactly how you're going to earn the five pointy things I'm giving this!

And I mean that sincerely. I’m having a hard time maintaining my cynical crustiness. You’re blowing my curmudgeonly cover! I hope you monitor your comments, so I can say thank you.

HillCountryCowboy

I have found that I have read all of Dream Cloud's stories at least once a few (like this one) twice. So even though I knew almost from the beginning who Julie was it was still fun to read again. And I had forgotten the Samantha punch line so that was a good finale. I'm distraught (never thought I'd use that word) that there are no more Dream Cloud stories. I read an oblique (another seldom used word) comment that there were some legal complications that kept this author from writing more, and that is very unfortunate, but at least I know that there is one really great author in this morass (another good word) of mediocrity on Literotica that knows how to both create a plot and write it well. Thanks and farewell!

~ there's always a "something unique" in your stories that make them different and interesting... Like the angel here...i was not expecting it! LOL... I couldnt stop reading your works and re-reading them! More power dreamcloud! :0)

If I like your story telling or plot structure better. Both are excellent, but now I'm going to spend an inordinate amount of time weighing which is better. Thank you for providing me with this most pleasant conundrum.

another "very good read"

pussy eater

I'm not sure why, your stories bring out in me so much emotion, if that is just your way of writing or your trying to fill gaps in peoples lives, God in Heaven knows that I have enough gaps and holes to fill the Ocean it seems.either reason will work for me, yeah it's true I have a really F-up life, some my fault, ok now that i'm an adult I take responsibility for my choices in life, But before i was able to do that those choices where my mothers and sisters, Imagine your mother telling you just how much she hated you , and I quote, I wish you had never been born ,I should knocked you in your head,when you were a baby , cause you'll never amount to anything, you'er just like your worthless uncle. No I wasn't a perfect child I had HDAD and ran as wild as i could, no body loved me, I take that back I had an uncle Terry who treated me with love and respect, he would even say he loved me, that was so long ago,I almost forgot. I must have been 8 or 9 then, he gave me my first bike, a sting ray,it used to be his from when he was a boy,but then my other uncle stole it saying it was his, the fight that started.. so back to my sisters my mother,and now I have this very distorted view of woman, I don't trust them, I'm sorry I didn't tell you about all the other stuff my so called mother did to me, so besides not wanting me.she gave me none of her time, and the time she did give was with a belt, or a stick ,she once beat me with the fan belt of a simi truck motor, and i became black and blue from head to toe…wife is asking for B- fast so got to go .R W really love your work

Thank you Dream Cloud for sharing this story. I had just finished reading one that instead of a happy ending, it turned into something sick and twisted. Your story got the taste of that one out of me. I am looking forward to reading your other ones. Again thank you for posting this story.

I'm hooked, you inspire me to write some of my stories..........................

Your writing skills are a gift. Thanks for sharing that gift with us, and taking the time to put your thoughts on paper. I know the time involved just putting a 4 page story together. Just to put the story together requires some thought. Thank You!

I have to admit it, I am addicted to your writing. My second time on this one and again, I feel so good afterwards. Wish there were more of your stories. Wish there were more authors of your caliber .

Thank you so much.

Great story! Very enjoyable. Liked the twist.

..... just because I wanted to enjoy it again. Your stories are as satisfying as a fine bottle of wine, but fortunately for your readers your stories can be enjoyed over and over.

I really enjoyed your story. Thank you.

Another really nice story.

I read and re-read your stories, they are wonderful.

Thank you

A really good story.

Enjoyed it

Caxtor

You never disappoint me. Thank you for another GREAT story.

Well developed, held me and blindsided me at the end. Excellent story!

Dear Author, Never saw it coming. You did a great job of story telling. Thank you for the trip which I found quite enjoyable. A strong five! jntiques

Is such a turn on, I have to say it. This is a lot because I don't even like leaving comments.

Great story, but the end was in another different level. This story is just AWESOME.

Okay, loved the story and out of all of yours that I have read so far, that was definitely the most shocking ending. I mean angels, really? Still loved it, keep up the great work DC!

Literally, fucking angels. No shit! give me a break.

Surprising story with a more surprising ending. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

This was an excellent tale, well written and managed to keep me wondering throughout with a surprise ending.....5 stars

Thank you

Thank you for the great pleasure of another of your absorbing and unique stories. Can only hope that you enjoy writing as much as your readers enjoy reading your work. Please do not cease giving us these gems.

I felt the natural ending would have been him looking around the cabin with the beat of the helicopter approaching. That was at the end of p. 3 and I was surprised to find more story on the next page. Other than that, I liked the story a lot. The sex scenes were nicely done; they got my juices going. I was almost hoping they would stay there in the cabin enjoying each other and having great, steamy sex until the end, perhaps being rescued at the last minute, perhaps found nude and entangled in bed having one last go at it.

But there are No criticisms, helpful, or otherwise, and my only comment echoes an earlier one, "More, more."

I'm slowly working my way through all of your submissions and I felt like I just had to comment. I love the style of your writing, I always feel like I've become some kind of emotional wreck after reading them but your writing takes me to another world and I thank you for my lost hours dreaming.

Keep up your good work, you have such a special talent. Thank you for sharing with us.

More, more, more

Please?

What a great story. A 5 star rating for sure. I loved the characters and the ending. What a great read. Thanks.

I absolutely loved your story! There was a legitimate build up in characters wih back stories and a plot. A previous commenter had written that you put subtle clues so the ending wasn't as big a surprise but it had that slight twist in the end that has all your readers wanting more - including myself!

You did a great job and I really look forward to a "part two" of this!

As the story went along, you dropped many tiny hints so that when the big reveal came it was pretty obvious what it was - not that I am unhappy about the way you did it - I liked it, a lot (especially the little twist you put in the end).

how really good you are. I don't know what else I can say, at the moment, that I haven't said in response to the previous stories I have read by you.

Very well put together and well worth the time reading it... Thanks for the story...

.........but I wish I could meet my own Julien (the male version) it would be just lovely! Anyway back to reality. Thank you for sharing this story and your talent. I have been reading many stories here on Lit and you are one of two of my favourite authors. There was a third author who was really talented but she used her fans for her own selfish reasons - to test out her stories on Lit only for her to sell her book on Amazon, then pull all her stories off lit, including ones she did not sell. I thought her shallow as well as mean. Don't get me wrong we all need money and some want fame, but really if you put your stories on here then go on to sell it! Have the decency to remember where your struggle started! If DC you ever choose to publish your works of art, please don't become heartless and forget us here! You may or may not know how many of your stories touch some of us in positive ways that enables the sadness to change into happy thoughts. Thank you

DeandraDee