by PoetMaster
I agree it was getting interesting then it just stopped. Needs a part 2 at the camp ground. So many possibilities. Hiking and fucking,sneaking in the bath house together late at night etc.
This story stopped right when it was starting to get interesting. Where's part 2 or page 2?? Wow this is just laziness!!! 1 star for you!!!
You end the story in a cliff hanger and that is piss poor writing
Damn was getting right into it and then it finished ,hope there is more to come,i was waiting for them to arrive at camp and eventually mum and dad join in
Very erotic start but there shud be more teasing and more lusting ,ending with hard frustrated sex.Just do it man.......... don't stop .
Tim gets laid on a regular basis but he can't believe he's looking at her pussy? Makes no sense. Otherwise its a hot story. Needs chapter 2.
That was so hot. I cant wait to read the next chapter. Your stories always are great. Keep up the good work!
Oh come on. You must must continue this story. It is soo soo hot yet it is only starting.
Humans aren't built in a way that allows some of the activities this describes. Hot story (although proceeds too fast), but more of a science fiction flavor.
I hope that the next chapter will be soon. Really hot so far, and I can only imagine what the author has in store for the next chapter. Thanks
I am always interested in stories which eventually end
up outdoors especially camping stories which have a
wider variety of scenarios for the story characters.
I noticed your little sneak preview into your story
when Don said, “Oh, yeah and to complete the primitive
experience, the showers and restrooms are all shared by
the campers,” Also that Tara started planning to tease
her brother Tim.
It sounds like your story may feature many exciting
adventures. I hope once they reach the primitive camp
area that you add a lot of details to your story.
Thank you.....
RecHiker
Now please hurry with Chapter 2. Hot stuff, so far!
Stroking as I read, and just when I'm ready.....waiting for chapter II....PLEASE!!!!!