All Comments on 'The Cheating Zone 01: Karen'

Very well done, indeed. Thank you for a good read.

I'd like to see more.

You have become an author I look forward to reading!!

Different!! And it was a good ending for her. Loved it!

I couldn't see where you were headed but I was enjoying the ride as the story flowed. It was a good read for sure. A few typos but who's perfect?

Keep them coming!

More like this.

Loved it!

Creepy and very well done.

A nice tribute to Rod.

I really like your style! *5* You are an excellent writer and I am hoping you will continue your revenge series sometime soon....Thank You from Seattle

Quite creative - well done.

I added a comment and it disappeared (cue twilight zone music)

Loved it! Loved it! Loved it!

If it had spelling or grammar issues too bad I got it and it didn't detract from the story!

Did she cheat - no. Would or could have cheated - maybe but she didn't. Main theme was the story and it worked. Didn't over think it an it worked. Good communicator/ story teller well done.

Did anyone else have the twilight zone music in their heads? Because I did, I figure it was good writing. Karen was a vehicle for Rod Serling and the Cheating Zone and it worked.

Well done and look forward to more....

not my cup of tea but still great writing

His voice and that show used to creep me out when I was a kid. That and the "Outer Limits". But this was nothing like those shows. She cheats - in her imagination? Where's JR? And when she tells her husband he basically tells her to "handle it" herself. Yeah that's a loving husband. What a prick! With nothing but unlikable characters and a nod to an old TV show, there really wasn't much to like here. Try again.

I love the Twilight Zone if you couldn't tell.

Loved this angle!

That was a great use of a terrific old TV show. I'm guessing there's been a few folks who have been in similar situations, but had their 'come to Jesus' moment before it got to cheating.

A great tribute to Rod Serling and the "Twilight Zone' as well. Fun to read. And for once it was possible to 'unfuck' someone. Nicely done.

That was good. Well done. 5 Stars.

You've always been very good, but you're getting even better with each story. This was outstanding. I could see Rod Serling, and hear the music as your story unfolded. It was written exactly like a Twilight Zone episode. A little Dallas , it was all dream ending too. Well done Saddletramp. I'm waiting for a Western next.

So much better than "no mercy". Delightfully weird. Well done. 5*

of a DejaVu in reverse TK U MLJ LV NV

"She didn't want to risk taking John's bodily fluids home to Kyle - at least not yet." - Not YET? Is she seriously considering bringing Kyle sloppy seconds?

"Karen Anderson and her supervisor, one John Hawkins, was terminated almost a year ago for violating the company's rules against fraternization," - She wouldn't be terminated, at least not without a big settlement. Hawkins was her supervisor, classic sexual harassment. even if she consented.

Cool ending! I'm a YUGE Twilight Zone fan.

I still say that she doesn't need to change jobs. He's her supervisor, there's an implied threat even if he never expressly pressures her, That's sexual harassment.

I thought is was lame and silly. She only regretted fucking around when she realized the consequences, based on external events. Her internal moral compass led her straight to John's cock, and nothing in the story indicates her character and ethics are now improved. She'll just be more careful when the next opportunity comes along.

She's still the same shallow arrogant stupid whore who was looking forward to some great adultery sex. She knows John's an asshole not above drugging women and she still works for him, is even excited by his attention? What does that tell you?

What is from the Twilight Zone is the premise that a whore becomes a good woman after she realizes she's a whore. This nincompoop knew she was a whore since puberty. If this is really the first time, its just the beginning. The dumb shit who has been spoiling her will totally deserve all the shit she will eventually bring down upon him. Deaf dumb and blind ends up fucked.

I don't see where Karen agreed to meet with Bull Nuts Hawkins anywhere. Granted she may have been at the cliff edge, but she blew him off (figuratively) before anything got started. Just because said bull nuts wanted to meet her doesn't mean she would meet with him. She should have told Hawkins to go fuck himself right at the beginning, and reported him to the powers that be. Besides if John was banging all the women in the office he would have been caught and fired long before he tried to get his clutches on Karen. Kyle was aware of Hawkins intentions and should have discussed his concerns with the law partners before it got out of control. Great story though. All Characters were well defined and the story flowed smoothly. Can't wait to see what this author comes up with next.

You people and your comments are making me embarrassed to actually like BTB stories

Really good, was feeling very Twilight Zonish and it turned out it literally was. Very well done.

@Anon, umm, she didn't actually cheat. The whole thing, including her having the multiple orgasms was part of her nightmare.

It's not a true test of morality not to have temptations. It's to have temptations and opportunities, but forsake them because it would hurt the ones you care about. She was tempted to cheat, her subconscious mind through her nightmare communicated to her the consequences of her possibly cheating. To me it is much more meaningful that my spouse doesn't cheat on me because she wouldn't want to hurt me, and she wouldn't want risk losing me. It could be argued either way, if her nightmare was because of what she loses or the fact that she loses the love of her husband. Either way it kept her from cheating, but for me it would make a big difference if it was because it was out of love for me, as opposed to consequences for her. It's a fine line, but it does make a difference.

I never support wife cheating or cuckoldry, but some of the BTB stuff is worse than cuckold stories. Too far fetched and not even erotic (which is the major point). I stopped reading in the middle of the story and just scrolled through. Javmore79, DTIverson, Carvohi, Ohio, Harddays, Blackrandi, Gmoon, where are you!!! Ughhh!!!

I just wrote a comment titled "Twilight Zone Crap." Went back and finished the story and want to correct my previous comment. After further review, I am embarrassed by the comment I wrote and see the greatness of this story. @Saddletramp, great story. Loved the finish and gave 5 stars.

What an original, fun story!

Great job - I gave you a 5!

Good display of versatility switching from your normal frontal assault writings. we

I didn't see anywhere in the story where Karen agreed to have an affair with Hawkins. She may have come close, but nowhere in the story did she agree to fuck Hawkins.

A very unique and entertaining departure from the status quo around here. My wife and I enjoyed it thoroughly please continue.

comment came back and made another comment, both as anonymous. Lit tries to allow just one comment from a single anonymous reader. This pretty much tell us that a dozen favorable or unfavorable anonymous comments can be made by one person. I assume the same applies to voting. It sort of explains why certain stories score well even if they are not all that good and why some well written and plotted stories score poorly. It's chaos in here!

AMerryman 2.0

Nicely imagined, well and concisely told. Now, if only one could manufacture at will a dream to pull an about-to-cheat wife back from the brink. Rather like the "Death's Door" episode of The Avengers. (No, not those Avengers. The real ones, Steed and Mrs. Peel.)

GA

Creative but it is interesting the husband shows no support for her even though she tries to get clean. Instead of going after lothario the husband is attacking the wife. That is a real twilight zone here.

Nevertheless this is a creative little piece.

"husband shows no support for her even though she tries to get clean. Instead of going after lothario the husband is attacking the wife." - Where do you see that?

"I'm a bit pissed that you didn't tell that creep 'no' right off the bat, but at least you're doing the right thing now." - Wow, what a VICIOUS attack! /s

"Of course I love you, Karen, I always have," he said. "But I think we need to have a serious talk about this after you've settled down, maybe even seek some counseling. I can't believe you were so gullible that you were falling for him like that." - Boy, that's SO unsupportive, how can she possibly stay with such an unfeeling heel! /s

To tie in a classic TV, a moral story, a bit of mystery, to classic cheating that prevents cheating? Tie them all together? Outstanding job!

God brought nightmare to Karen. So Karen woke up and avoid terrible danger at the last monent. It tells us to be honest to our family. Great Job!

I have long been an anon commenter here. Since summer 2013 to be exact. OK, some people have been here longer sure, not trying to win any award. Anyway, I KNOW that it had long been impossible to post anon more than once FROM THE SAME IP ADRESS. So if you are on your windows laptop, then switch to your I- Phone, THEN go to the public library, then you could make three anon comments on the same story. Otherwise, no dice. Since comment moderation started, I personally have been commenting and yes even reading less. No longer here on the daily, I find unless I have a meaningful contribution, I usually skip it altogether. So out of habit, it never occurred to me to even try to post more than once, since the review times take so long for just one comment to be reread. A while back I read here a theory that if you were registered, you could log out, and post anon, but since the IP address was registered to a user, It would (so the theory went) be able to post more than once anonymously. I never read this confirmed nor denied. I actually registered once, but had problems with my email, so never was able to log in again. But during that brief time, I never got to experiment with more than one anon posting. Since comment moderation, today after this comment posts, I will try again with a comment on this story. If you don't read a logical anon follow-up to this, then you'll know I wasn't permitted to do so.

But a few things first.

My private theory on the two anon back to back comments you referenced HERE earlier? Not the same person. First was a troll. Second was a troll trolling the first troll. I think this mostly because of the moderation time delay. Too hard to get back to back comments, without a different comment inserted in between.

Second to the author:

In case I don't get my second comment, (prolly won't), I did like this attempt. It was diverting, although heavily telegraphed. In honor of SBrooks' nitpickery, her car wouldn't have been left there, after an investigation into her death, much less after the first week it would have been towed out of the hotel parking lot. However, but once the Twighlight Zone aspects of mysterious circumstances are introduced, I suppose Rod Sterling himself could have had it transported there from the impound lot.

Anyway, I didn't, and don't recommend others to, take story details so seriously. This type of stuff is just for the author to consider.

Thank you for the effort!

Good job for creating a unique story here. I know how hard it is to come up with unique storylines and appreciated you taking the time to entertain us readers. There could be a lot of interesting stories using the the Zone framework. Keep it up. I want to read more of them.

Great story...... fade to black!

and different. the twist, very nice.

Finally a story with a different point of view. Very good so far..........

Your story could have been so bad with all the cliches beloved to the LW writers' association. But you threw off the old and jumped into a different circumstance and it worked!

R.

I'm sure this story is awesome but I'm dumb so I couldn't understand what the fuck happened. meh.

Clever story. Short enjoyable read.

Yes, I miss the Twilight Zone.

BTW, it is a STRAIT-jacket, as in Straits of Gibraltar (a tight passage).

Loved the Rod Serling reference. It made me Laugh at the End.

As soon as she woke in the motel I thought that this seemed like the Twilight Zone, only took another 1/2 page to connect the dots. <slaps forehead>

Great read thank you. Not the 1st LW/TZ crossover, but a darn sight lighter than the other.

Great read very creative!

You are still on my follow list!

Erotic Horror for a loving wife. Fun read, I miss Twilight Zone. Five stars.

You created an interesting mood. Very different. I liked it.

Loved it

This was a really good one with a brilliant ending. I am now looking forward to the rest of this series. Very well done.

this got a 5 from me. Very creative. I loved it.

Damn good 6*, ya sucked me in until Kyle named the TV host. Then it all fell into place. As I read the last paragraph I read it in my mind using his Rod's voice and could see him saying it with a cigarette in his hand - really good.

This type of creativity is sorely lacking in the L-LW site.

Damn good 6* - ya sucked me in until Kyle named the TV host. As I read the last paragraph I heard Rod's voice and memory visualization with his signature cigarette in his hand (that later killed him).

This type of creativity is sorely missing in the L-LW site. Hooyah, salute!

A nicely done twist to a possible cheating wife tale. Or “was” it a cheating affair? Hum, only known in the Twilight Zone. Top marks for the idea.

Definitely not your average cheating wife story. Well executed.

After she said she did not want to bring any fluids home "yet",I wished he had given her the boot but you can't always get your way.

In all long-running TV series when the writers run out of stories, imagination and talent the offerings always descend to some kind of supernatural or science-fiction level. This story represents that fall from skill to delusional exixtence! It was rubbish, well written but rubbish!

The author truly did the old story in a nice new polished case. I loved the hook up with Rod Serling and the Twilight Zone which I enjoyed some sixty years ago.

Completely not what I was expecting when I started reading. I enjoyed the homage paid to the classic genre and the twisting made it feel exactly how one would expect after an episode of The Twi... I mean, The Cheaters Zone.

We written, well paced, and certainly not how I thought this might turn out. Well done!

...what a great story. Unique, imaginative, just so well written. I like your stories. 5 stars. Thanx!

Loklie

I just found this. Now, I have to read the entire series. Awesome imagination!

Love it!

Used to love the Twilight Zone, the whole family watched it. Of course now what episodes I remember are probably all mixed in withe episodes from 'Outer Limits' and 'One Step Beyond.'

I got into Sirling's 'Night Gallery' too, although not as much as the original.

Good story.

I was a child when twilight zone came out on TV. This story made me think of that show

Could almost hear the twilight zone theme song.

5 stars and 2 thumbs up. Thanks for the story and the chuckle. Looking forward to the rest of the series 😀

Outstanding!

This was not at all what I had expected. Great twists throughout.

Lost one star because there were no repercussions for the Cunt. Otherwise good story .

Just what do you suggest as a consequence, stoning, beheading, boiled in oil? How about a spin on the rack? I shudder to think what would be appropriate in your world if she had actually done what she dreamed.

Tramp, keep on, keepin' on with a television icon, some of us remember it from the first time around. Signed: BTW

Good

great I always enjoyed twilight zone. definite5

Instead of going to another department, go to your HR department, who are required by Federal, as well as many state and local laws, to fully investigate these complaints. With the "other girls" in the office, along with his apparent use of date-rape drugs to force sex with his subordinates, the <i>excrement will forcefully impact the operating mechanical, forced-air impeller.

Ha ha I LOVED it , what a twist , brilliant ! Makes me wanna marathon with Rod too !

If this was meant, at least in part, as a tribute to one of the iconic shows of the 20th century, congratulations. Bullseye. A well thought out piece of writing, well executed.

You did it again!! 7 stars cause YOU know I can't count. Hoss, the Bear Definitely approves. Love your stories . I will read anything you write. Keep up the good work.

The BEAR

I really li8ked it. Quite different.

DG Hear

short and not very sweet

YAYYY! Well done! Very well done.

LWlurker

Brilliant!

Great story with a totally different approach to the typical cheating wife with her boss story.

You are a great story teller. When is the next installment of FLASH coming out?

5 Stars .. I loved the twilight zone

These slight of hand stories have become irritating.

interesting................................

excellent!

I didn’t catch on to title till after I finished the story. That was 5 stars worth of fun.

Another great story by Yhe Great Saddle Tramp! Thank You again for your amazing writing 5 stars as usual.

Two thumbs way up! 10 out of 10.

Kudos. One of your imaginative best!

But you have to be old enough to remember The Twilight Zone to really appreciate this story.

Thankfully I am....

Good story, but after that ending, I'd be surprised if the lady didn't need psychiatric aid!

Classic saddletramp. I suspect from reading his other stories that we may not always see all the social issues the same way, BUT are probably 99% agreement on basic values. A good marriage IS the bedrock of society. From a 70+ old codger, love the Twilight Zone plot. May you keep writing here or some venue for discerning readers. Thanks dude!

Very entertaining. 5/5

“We know that a dream can be real, but who ever thought that reality could be a dream? We exist, of course, but how, in what way? As we believe, as flesh-and-blood human beings, or are we simply parts of someone’s feverish, complicated nightmare? Think about it, and then ask yourself, do you live here, in this country, in this world, or do you live, instead — in The Twilight Zone?” from an episode of the Twilight Zone - "Shadow Play" - found on the internet. Great job, Author!

WOW!!! Just friggin' WOW!!!

precious

Ha funny story. Try gt