All Comments on 'The Chosen Road'

Great, great story. Love it. AAAAAA++++++

Was really enjoying it, was sorry when it ended so suddenly. Feels like there was a lot more to their story. The wedding could have been fun, and their drive back.

Great writing, fun dialogue and enjoyed the characters.

I enjoyed the story very much. Romantic and well written. The pieces of the story fit well and it felt realistic and not rushed in any way. I gave it five stars but I think my only critique was the ending seemed too abrupt. I might have left out the ex trying to mend the broken relationship, maybe the couple meeting each other’s family and definitely something fun during the wedding. A great story, though. Thank you!

This was a great story, l thoroughly liked it enough to give you 5/5 for it.

You wrote well enough for me to feel l was in the back seat listening to their banter.

Well done. I wish you every success as this tale is good enough to compete with others.

I do like your harem story and must get back to it. This change of pace showed your talent.

I hope you add another chapter to this story, describing the drive back to college.

Here’s hoping.

Best story I've read in quite a while. I hope you consider expanding the story of Seb and Jill!

Story was great can we get an update about Seb and Jill after the Thanksgiving break

We’ll done. Please, let’s hear more about these young people. 5 stars.

From this bit: "No." Evie shook her head. "You can carry your own laundry, thank you. Besides... I have a surprise for you!" She said excitedly. "Something I think will cheer you up."

I knew exactly where it was heading although I confess I wasn't expecting the lingerie and didn't expect much more than a basic "Goodbye Stephanie, we're not together anymore... Remember?"

I don't normally read stories over 3 pages but you hooked me on the initial well portrayed verbal fight.

A full 10* from me.

H_32

Nicely done. Good characters, very good dialogue and a captivating plot. Lovely.

Good story. I enjoyed the plot line as it reminded me of something similar in my past life. However, the ending was a bit too abrupt. Hoping to see more of Seb and Jill.

Wanted them to meet at the wedding. Still a great story

I guess he dodged a bullet!

5

I request part 2 - from Steph's POV. Then a part 3 follow up for Seb and Jill

More! More! More!

It’s cute. I could see you building on this and. Their relationship back at school. Great job!

The MC certainly seems to have "dodged the bullet"!

I enjoyed this and feel there is definitely scope for a sequel or two.

Keep going!!

I was enjoying the story...until the end. Was his sister the same one that told him his ex was a cheating bitch? Why would she let her into the house to make-up if she knew her brother got cheated on friend or not. And I get the whole ex trying to make up gives you nice closer on that relationship, but the two main characters not seeing each other after that leaves the ending if the story feeling quite hallow in my opinion. It feels like Seb is in relationship limbo after turning down the naked ex and just saying can't wait to see whats next rather than meeting Jill again and reaffirming his choice.

Excellent story, well written, wouldn't mind seeing a few more chapters to this story

Very well written story with a great ending. You should write a sequel and continue the story with a romantic time together at the wedding, followed up with their growing and deepening relationship after they return to school where their growing romance progresses and deepens into a loving lifetime together.

Loved this part and I want to read the next part about Seb and Jill at the wedding and the ride back to school.

Hoping there will be a follow up with the wedding and time back at campus. Regardless, a well written story.

Great story and I could definitely enjoy more of the same

Great Story. If we didn't get an update I would be terribly sad

Really enjoyed this one. Would like to see the characters again when you have the time and inspiration.

College kid is swamped with work. Can't get home for Thanksgiving but his HS GF demands he come home or she'll cheat on him. Dude drives with a girl for 32 to get home. While travelling, he cheats on the GF that he was coming to visit. This is insane!

Great story, the ending was abrupt - needs a part 2

What they wrote, plus!!

Thank you for a fun story,

Be Well and Happy.

Paul

I would usually not read a story by an author with his story record.

However it was in Romance and sounded interesting.

It was well done. Great plot, a great life lesson. Clear characters presented fairly.

For me, Sir Aeghann, it is not the sexual contact that made this a great story, but the hint at what makes for a true and lasting relationship, unselfish and fun-loving people. He proved to be great husband material, and a woman who not what to look for wisely sized up his potential and acted.

The Hoary Cleric

Looks like the votes are coming in all pro storyline

I not just about everyone has voted for more about Seb and Jill, please don’t disappoint us.

More please!!!!!!

Needs part 2, the wedding and drive home… but 5 stars.

Well written snd turning too love but not finished so I can't rate it. Finished it would be a five.

There has to be a sequel, doesn‘t it ?!?

Like that it‘s nothing but a cliffhanger - an that would be a shame !

I‘ll wait for the sequel to vote … ! 😉

Well-written description of the differences between his relationships with Steph and Jill.

I thought the ending nicely mirrored the beginning and it didn't feel unfinished to me at all. The mentions of future plans between them definitely makes me want more, though. I'd be willing to read their ride home but I get it if it's a standalone since this was your contest entry. It's still a nice story!

Nicely done.

A very engaging story with realistic character development and a rational outcome with hope for a better future.

Thanks

Looks like it's in dire need of a conclusion! 4.6*

Great story, would like to see it continue.....

Please, sir, may we have another?

Good. It's got to have a sequel so we, the readers, get closure. 😃😃😃😃. 5⛤

Really enjoyed your use of humor… about the music, Friends, etc. you know how to “turn a phrase” as the saying goes. If I could offer a piece of constructive feedback, it would be to work on the parts where you’re telling… it’s better to show than tell. Still, I gave this a 5 and have read it twice in as many days.

More of these two would be great, if you could create the right situation to drive the story. Maybe the rest of the weekend, meeting families, and then getting back and finding out that Mike and Jill’s roommate conspired to omit the detail that he should get his own room.

The ending left too many unanswered questions. I hope you are going to continue this story.

So you can write a romance story. You are great with bondage relationships in your harem series, and I'm happy to see you have a lot of range! Great job.

A few days have passed since I wrote my first comments. This is still a great story! The male leads in both your stories have almost a perfect character and background. They both seem to have a woman who did them wrong, they are both incredibly fit sexy men who are great at loving women; they are innocently naive in a good way about the world. The issue to me is that they don't have enough problems to be real! I'd like to see doubt about themselves, maybe some bad decision they made, maybe someone they cared about passed or they failed to get into their passion college. If I could, (and I vastly increased my confidence and fitness), I'd be happy to be them - but it would take a huge huge amount of confident and discipline.

In the harem story, I'm hoping that once they all move in, he somehow gets with the mean girl from his HS. He's so sexy apparently every woman on earth wants to be with him. Maybe she needs to be spanked to come, I want a problem in his life! The reason is in the real world we all have some problems.

This was amazing, each character felt vivid and electric. Our male lead is a bit of too good at everything, but I loved him anyway. I can't wait to read more of your stuff.

Thank you! Among the recent dispiriting flood of LW betrayals, and an almost equally dispiriting flood of "Romances" about shallow "beautiful" people who don't know how to be kind to the person they are supposedly in "love with", this story stands out not just because of a positively charged romance, but because I REALLY REALLY LIKE both protagonists as persons and am rooting for them, and the author didn't disappoint and they are both worth that rooting. Thank you! Easy 10 stars. I don't know if there will be sequels, but if so, I am looking forward to them.

Thank you for the story. I was happy to read a breakup and romance story based on self-discovery and understanding instead of vitriolic hate and bitterness which seems so pervasive these days.

Carry on!

Beautiful story! Very well written and two very likable characters. Five stars and a fave! I really hope write at least one more chapter; I'd love to see what happens next with the new happy couple.

How you chose to end this story is quite effective. It was a pleasure to read. I would really like to see some sort of continuation, but I’m just being greedy.